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This is a re-write of a tale I started in 2016, and re-wrote it in 2021, breaking into 11 Chapters. It was generally well evaluated, with ratings between 7.5 and 8.00.

I re-read it recently and discovered flaws in the story: occasional lack of consistency and missing small parts (breaking into separate chapters was a bad idea), and small grammatical errors. Sometimes I had to stop and try to remember how the story developed. So, once more I re-wrote, re-edited, re-checked, and in general, improved the readability of the story. I also joined the chapters back into one long narrative.

It shows a tale about love, of personal relationships getting close and some fading away, of business challenges and successes, and of people deeply in love. It has sex (after all, this is a site for erotic stories), but the sex is only a basic ingredient of a much richer story, of people falling deeper and deeper in love. It might be too sugary for some, but I like love stories with a happy endings.

I hope that you enjoy reading it as I enjoyed writing it. Read the first chapters, and if you enjoy them, finish the tale and give me feedback. If you don’t like it, let me know and I promise to reflect on your commentaries.

A Long and Lasting Finish

All pieces come together, and the family is united, having friends they care for – and who care for them – and they made a long-lasting impact on their and others' lives. For them, a Fantasy about Love turned into reality.

The story is finished - it took me a long time to get here. I started it as an exercise to practice my English as I’m a German and have lived in Brazil for a long time. It slowly grew and grew, but now it’s done.

I had fun writing it (even after re-reading, re-spelling, re-editing, re-writing, etc., several times….). I hope that you had fun reading it. Let me know – I would appreciate it.

I was taken to court by two irate readers. They could not finish the story because everything was wrong: There was no logic throughout the story, the English was stilted and uncomfortable to read since sentences were way too long, and especially the dialogues were horrible. No Australian would ever talk this way, they were too difficult to read, and especially no Australian woman would ever talk in this complicated way. They would use easy, short sentences – and my dialogue had them talking about difficult subjects in a sophisticated manner. In their opinion, I was wasting their time and they did not finish.
Well, I might agree that my stories lack logic, my English is stilted, and my dialogues could improve. I disagree completely, however, that Australian women cannot express themselves in any other than simple sentences. I lived in Australia for four years and met extremely intelligent women – some probably more intelligent than I – and it took all my efforts to accompany them in serious conversations. And they were using sentences that were more than ten words long. Additionally, my story shows a very aggressive and successful female executive, a graduate in philosophy from a good university, and a focused IBM manager. I doubt that any conversation among them would be boring ….
I hope that you enjoy this new chapter, the next to last one of the story. It is supposed to be funny and tender.
PS.: This reader commented about the overall story I published in another site. It had over 50.000 downloads, and the weighted average rating from one to five was 4,76. Not bad for someone who writes stories with stilted English, lacks logic, and prefers intelligent women ….

James manages successfully to merge two companies. Maureen Lady de Winter is formally introduced to the German High Society at its annual Ball in München. A dear friend succumbs to a long illness, and Eileen makes a difficult decision but that resolves a problem in the four lover's relationship.

James recovers from the explosion at the Sales Meeting and his resignation from the company. A consulting job is boring, but when he is offered to return as President, a new position as CEO of a big company has already opened up. He accepts, Jenny follows him after another incident in the previous firm. Things settle down, love is exciting, and his first negotiation has appropriate rewards. A New Life has begun.