Arquillius: Blog

Joel wrote the following:
I'm having fun and giggles with your story, but
you need an editor/proofreader. I'm in Chapter 9
and you're driving me crazy. You got stuck on
repeatedly misusing 'defiantly' for 'definitely'.
Arrgh!

I wouldn't bother if I didn't like you're
(intentional - just joking) writing.

Your Friend Joel


My Response:

Dear Joel,

I am well aware of the error. I simply don't have the time or energy to change things right now.

Let me explain it. In additiion to posting these wonderfully superficial stories that go no where about a boy's incestious journey into adulthood with his sisters, mother, etc; I work a full time job, I make 3d models, and I try to detox from the stupid of that fulltime job. And if you wanna know how far the stupid extends... I work as "Computer repair" and have people call me and cuss me out when their internet doesn't work, only for me to enlighten them that I'm not the internet department... no seriously, they call me when their internet is out, and my job is virus removal and things equivalent to this.

Beyond that, I have not reviewed these stories in quite some time, besides the obvious editing to smash one version of the story into another.

If I remember right, and double checking I do, chapter 9 is part of the original story, and that's what it is... original, how I wrote it back in 2007 or so, when it was a big fuck you to my fat ass roommate (I called him Pizza the hutt. Kudos to anyone who gets the reference) who, by the way was into furry little boys, didn't like that I was writing an incest story because, and I quote, "No one likes incest, it's disgusting." Mind you the last time I saw the guy was in 2010 and he was still a virgin.... not even kidding, the guy couldn't PAY to lose his virginity.

But since I'm rambling, let me tell a little side story about pizza the hutt here.

(Clears throat) Okay so Pizza the hutt had a real name. His name was David. Guy weighed nearly 500 lbs (Not kidding, he had to turn his ass sideways to fit through a normal doorway) and constantly stank. Now my wife (girlfriend/fiancee at the time of the story) was a little overweight in the same way a pregnant woman is. No, I'm not kidding, my wife always looks pregnant. And if you realize that a lot of my work revolves around incest and pregnancy, you will realize something else... I have a pregnancy fetish. But that is besides the point. Okay so Pizza the hutt sees her in a bikini top and says something completely clueless, mind you we had just had a day of playing in the pool in the apartment complex we lived in... and we hadn't changed yet. What he said was for her to go get clothes on because... something about him not wanting to see her like that... yeah, um don't quite remember, but my wife has D-Cup tits and Was showing plenty of skin. Mind you this was before we discovered his fetish. So later on, we're out at Sam's club (big warehouse type store where you can buy shit in bulk in the united states) and we run into a coworker of mine (Also 500 lbs, and also named dave) So Dave2 is filling up PTH's car and I'm chatting with him, cause Dave2 worked at the gas station section and PTH ran in to grab a 24 oz pepsi from the food court, and Dave2 tells me how he's off in like 10 minutes and he has this hot date.

Me: Dave2, tell me... you're obviously a bit on the heavy side... how do you get all these ladies to date you?

Dave2: Dunno. I just chat with them. they get to know me a little, we go out for drinks, i get laid.

Me: Well I need to know your secret. PTH really needs to get laid and he's got a stick up his ass from being a virgin too long.

PTH and Dave2's date walk up to the gas station at the same time, and Dave2's date is what most guys (i say most guys because of my fetish) find to be a 10/10. She's 5'5" tall, dark brown hair, not an ounce of fat on her, with D or double d cup tits. Not even kidding. So standign there, I think I have it all figured out. Dave2 has confidence. She doesn't care that he's overweight, he's tried to burn it off, but he still finds a way to make himself irresistable to her... or atleast he did, they broke up like a month later, but whatevs.

And by the time they had broken up, I had discovered PTH's little porn collection on a laptop he kept in the living room... where he would Stuff his fat hand down his fat ass pants and jack off regardless of who was around...


Okay, easy assumption from what i said... PTH was gross and scummy.

No seriously... he was... And he finally meets a girl online, flies to florida to meet her, and she wont even kiss him or hug him...

So what was I saying? Oh yeah the mistake, yeah I know about it, it was back before i even bothered proofreading my own shit, when I was trying to throw up new chapters each day to AFF.net because I wanted to show PTH that he was wrong, and that my readers did like incest... yeah they showed him. Literally hundreds of people telling him to go fuck himself when i let the readers know what he said.

So there ya go. That's my excuse. Just never got around to fixing it.

Thanks for the eye though.

The new stuff has a proofreader/editor, and is getting published.

Lots of love.

Joshua L Edwards
AKA Arquillius AKA Earthix AKA Nova

Message from: lesswright69:


I take issue with your use of the word

"defiantly." Look it up in a dictionary. I think

the word you are looking for is "definitely."


Dear Less,


I'm not looking for an editor. If you're looking to be an editor for others you can go to this link: Volunteer to Edit


I appreciate your input on a script that's about 10 years old, but i won't be bothering to make changes any time soon.


Thanks again!

Joshua L Edwards

Aka Arquillius AKA Earthix AKA Nova AKA AONN

Hi everybody!

Okay so I haven't been posting reviews, or questions lately... good reason behind that. I have been sick and not up to it.

So you probably noticed SWMS is back up, but marked as "to be continued" instead of "Finished" that's because I'm making a bold move and taking all those rewrites, rewriting them as added chapters and throwing them in before SWMS 2 is posted. So yeah, new bits of the story intigrated into original continuaty. First is Revamped and reloaded, then I'll do the final retelling in the final chapters and let it all tie together before releasing an updated version of SWMS2. So for now enjoy. Not sure when the new chapters will be up.

Voting is still disabled, because I don't care.

Reviews will be put on the blog.

Questions may be put on the blog.

--Joshua

Hi everybody!
(Waits for Hi dr. Nick response)

So you probably want to know what I've been up to, and I'm not gonna lie. I've been mostly playing games. Minecraft, Fallout 4. Played around abit with my NIS series, but ultimately scrapped it. I've also been watching a bit of old TV episodes.

For those of you who don't read into my writing, a lot of it has basis on other series. Aric Chronicles takes a bit from Chrono Trigger and DBZ. Don't Change takes a bit from Power Rangers.

So how does this tie in? Well, I've been working on Don't Change 2. This takes its basis from, additionally, the Different StarGate Series. I've started my writing for it, and I have some creative consultants on board regarding certain Characters.

This Book introduces several new characters in the war, and will follow the Fallen Terra Warriors leader, Joshua. If you didn't read what happened with him, he's lost his powers (much like the Green Ranger in power rangers) giving his powers up completely to save the life of a woman he loved. He tried getting them back the old fashioned way, and now he's off on a journey that may be fruitful in getting him back on the team.

But worry not, it's not the last we've seen of the original group. The book does cover their goings on as well, though it's main focus is on Joshua and his new team. As usual, the heroes of Dimension Zero will be making appearances.

Thanks for your continued readership;

Joshua L. Edwards aka Arquillius

Monki86 wrote: Dear Arquilius

I admit I don't totally recall what I wrote you,
but from what you quoted, it seems there's no need
to pull that card. I neither recall asking you to
change your story nor asking to become your
editor.

Nor do I recall giving you any grief about it
either. I'm sorry if I did and you left it out of
the quote, but it does not look it from what you
quoted, nor does it seem like something I'd give
anyone grief about.

As far as I recall and can see from what you
quoted, I was giving you a friendly tip for future
stories (or rl uses of the expressions).

Getting all pissed and posting that you don't need
services that were never offered is a rather poor
reaction, kinda like throwing feces at people.
Sure, you might have had a really bad day and
weren't in the mood to find out something you
wrote doesn't mean what you thought it did, but
hey, chill, nobody's questioning your intelligence
here or insulting you otherwise.

Kind regards,

Monki86



Dear Monki86,

1. As you can see i copy and paste the email.
2. This is how I interpret it.
3. Not looking for a therapist or psychiatrist either, thanks though.

Arquillius