Megansdad: Blog

Since posting 'The Job Offer,' I have received a lot of feedback. I have even had an extensive email conversation with one of my readers. She at first suggested that the story should have been 3-4 times longer. I am unable to come up with that much. I did add some italicized text to show her internal monolog. And changed her conversation with Mr. Miles to fit her personality better. It previously showed her as being a 'closet' submissive after she said she wasn't. The MC is an exhibitionist, or more accurately, a nudist wannabe. That doesn't mean she is automatically a submissive.

She later expressed that she would have quit by saying her safeword during the whipping. I am trying to rewrite her character to show her determination to complete the weekend to attend the party. She is desperate for the extra cash. She is unaware of her mother's involvement at this point.

Instead of the 'closet' submissive I made her out to be originally, I am rewriting her character to be an independent person desperate to make extra money to help her mother by attending this party.

I'll explain more in the story. I am also working on part 2, 'the club.' While the changes are not extensive enough to warrant a reread, curiosity does.

It seems the troll who voted first on Part 1 did get to part 2 in time. It received better votes than part one. So it appears my followers like the character and the path I took it. Let me know if I should write a part 3. In each email tell me what you like about the story and what you'd like to see in part 3.

Just submitted episode 2. I don't know if there will be an epidsode 3 but it's not out of the question.

Before I get into my rant I wanted to make a special shout out to Purplecat and all of those who pointed out how much I suck at editing my own work. Purplecat I still say pet is correct. I still have my dictionary from 1981 when I was a freshman in High School. Merriam-webster online says petted is correct, but then it also say pet as a transitive verb means to take offense to sulk. Even if it was a diminutive form of petulant I still don't see that definition. In my book petulant mean to be an ass or a jackass. not pet. Anyway that's the end of my rant. Thank you guys again for the help. I'm going to post this one last time and leave it. I will be removing the comments and voting as well.

Less that 5 min and my story has 169 dnlds. Has a 6.9 score already. thank you for a nice score. For those of you who have read it already I have corrected some errors, inserted a missing paragraph, and differentiated between human and alien speech. Tavi uses contractions and the alien doesn't.

I may give the creature a name in a future chapter but I haven't decided. I am working on the next story and will post it when it is complete, hopefully I'll remember to edit 'before' I post it.