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I just posted my new story and I already have to repost it to fix something. I had the note inside the invitation in a table to make it look handwritten but it didn't convert to SOL. It was removed from the story So I have to remove the table and try something else.
For those of you who liked this story, you will be happy to know that I have cleaned up the first three chapters (I had way more errors than I thought) and added to them. Chapter three has been expanded some. The part between the impact and the landing on Earth has been completely rewritten. I decided I didn't like the way I had it originally. I have started Chapter 4 as promised, just not WHEN I promised it. The virus that "killed" Alena in chapter three is explained in chapter four. I am leaving Four open for a five but I make no promises of if or when. I will keep working on chapter four and post them all at once.
After doing a bit of research (Googling) I learned the World Naked Bike Ride (WNBR) is a real event. I will not be adding anything to the bike ride event I will be expanding the event in the pub (the after-party).
The naked run in San Fransisco is also real. While it is not technically legal the police allow nudity during the run. All runners must get dressed immediately after completing the race or risk being arrested. I added a footnote about the race.
I couldn't think of anything else to improve the story so this will be my last repost, unless someone points out something to make it worth fixing.
Since posting 'The Job Offer,' I have received a lot of feedback. I have even had an extensive email conversation with one of my readers. She at first suggested that the story should have been 3-4 times longer. I am unable to come up with that much. I did add some italicized text to show her internal monolog. And changed her conversation with Mr. Miles to fit her personality better. It previously showed her as being a 'closet' submissive after she said she wasn't. The MC is an exhibitionist, or more accurately, a nudist wannabe. That doesn't mean she is automatically a submissive.
She later expressed that she would have quit by saying her safeword during the whipping. I am trying to rewrite her character to show her determination to complete the weekend to attend the party. She is desperate for the extra cash. She is unaware of her mother's involvement at this point.
Instead of the 'closet' submissive I made her out to be originally, I am rewriting her character to be an independent person desperate to make extra money to help her mother by attending this party.
I'll explain more in the story. I am also working on part 2, 'the club.' While the changes are not extensive enough to warrant a reread, curiosity does.
It seems the troll who voted first on Part 1 did get to part 2 in time. It received better votes than part one. So it appears my followers like the character and the path I took it. Let me know if I should write a part 3. In each email tell me what you like about the story and what you'd like to see in part 3.
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