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Good story, great premise.
Basically an Isekai but desperately needs help.
With polishing could be a really good story.
Great idea, good premise, excellent description. Let down by editing. Dude, you need an editor, sorry!
It has been pointed out to me by a reader, still surprised I even have those! That I made a boo boo. In four he didn't buy the ring of warmth, but in five he has it. Tomorrow I'll edit that in four and fix it. Kudos to OmegaPet-58 for spotting that!
Holy shit.
Both seem to be doing really well, I've had a lot of nice comments with both and some really, really constructive criticism which I'm pleased about. New World was run through by my editor NNPDAD, check out his work as well and I’m pleased with how five has turned out. Yes, I got a thing for game of thrones, if you know House of the dragon, you’ll get the scissoring reference hehehe. I am working on other stuff and will post as and when I get around to it. NNPDAD has six, and I will probably post it sometime next week. I plan on doing ten chapters then having a break from New World and see what happens in the new year! If all goes to plan, this will be my first completed story. Glad you’re all enjoying it!
I’m still looking for suggestions on the whole plant thing with New World, based on the Shield heroes, shields ability to improve plants. Let me know what you think! I don’t want it to be a new ring, because I’ll end up looking like Thanos or the Mandarin. “They’ll never see me coming.”
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