Dark Apostle: Blog

How not to run the country.

While perusing the stories, I came across "Topless Daughters at the Pool" and decided to give it a go. It's a good idea and one I haven't come across before in my travels through the erotic fiction landscape. The setup is intriguing and has the potential to lead to some steamy, taboo-flirting scenarios that could really get readers' pulses racing. I genuinely hope the author takes this as the constructive feedback it's intended to be, not as a jab at their writing chops. Lots of folks around here get pretty defensive when critiqued, but that's the only way to grow and level up your skills.

While I like the idea and the story set up, the execution falls short in several areas. The narrative suffers from grammatical errors, awkward sentence structure, and a lack of proper formatting, resulting in a wall of text that can be challenging to navigate. The writing style comes across as immature, more reminiscent of a teenager's work than that of a seasoned author.

Despite these shortcomings, I believe that with the guidance of a skilled editor, it could undergo a transformative revision process. The author's creative vision and unique perspective are evident, even if they are somewhat obscured by the technical issues. Although the formatting hurdles initially made it difficult to engage with the story, I found myself drawn to the core concept and felt compelled to provide constructive feedback.

So dearest author, if you're reading this, don't throw in the towel. Stick with it and keep at it - you've got the creative spark, the seed of something that could be truly titillating. Just like Superman squeezing coal into diamonds with his Kryptonian grip, you've got the power to transform this rough draft into a polished gem of erotic literature.

Even Lady Whistledown started somewhere!

Embrace the edit, trim the excess, and let your voice ooze off the page. With some tender loving care, your story could go from a clumsy first time to a five-star trip to O-town. You've got this - now get in there and make it sizzle!

Damn… Now I’ve got a hankering for a burger.

Looking for any good poker stories, been watching rounders and want to try my hand. Thoughts?

So, three stories knocked out. I'll openly admit that I use AI to help write those stories. It helps improve my grammar, flow, editing skills, word choice, dialogue, and even helps me capture my own voice and writing style more easily, with that caveat. I can get it to write like me relatively easily, to a certain extent. I'm actually in the process of running "Wishes" through it, to see how well it goes. If it's any better, I'll edit it, get Steven to edit, and then post it and see what the overall response is. "Boys in the Lab," "Fantasy About My Mom," and "Tits" were all written with the help of Claude AI. I still definitely have Steven edit them, but even he admits it's cut down on my grammar mistakes. My writing goes from "fuck me, that was bad" to "fuck me, that's good!" All three were written with the aid of AI. I don't let it do all the work, but I am learning things like better writing techniques.

Boys in the lab hit 5902
Mom hit 949
Tits 2225
Not bad aye!

Holy shit. I was not expecting that, for a story where I was jerkin' the merkin' to Emma Thompson. I'm glad you like it you fucking degenerates! I'm in good company here. As always, my love goes out to those who edit it, Stephen had the pleasure of editing this one, with, less lecturing than normal. And to those who took the time to read it. I'm glad you all liked it. Fucking hell, five thousand downloads oO - Consider my mind blown.