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In the far distant future humanity fights for survival against an alien civilization. This is one man's part in the fight.
Size: 666 KB (127,550 words)
Incomplete and Inactive
Genre: Science Fiction
Sex Contents: Minimal Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, Science Fiction, Military, War

Review by Jetcrash747   [other reviews by Jetcrash747]

Reviewed:


It's been a while since I have post posted a review. This one is an unfinished adventure that we are waiting patiently for 'Random Writer ' to finish.

He first started posting 'The Private' in Dec 2011 and has spread out twenty-four chapters into July of 2015. He has said that the story is almost complete so the next will be the entire story.

Anyway the story starts out in the distant future in a space ship. There we meet we meet private Sweeney, a man condemned to die a private, serving at half pay. He has served for 27 years, fighting for the survival of humanity in a war against aggressive lizard like creatures, who like to eat us.

As we come to know private Sweeney, learning about why he is serving in the Space Force, about his love life and why he survives when everyone around him does not. We are introduced to someone who wants to save him from his Life Sentence .

The story has action, sex, fighting with aliens, and love. Even if it never gets finished it still has a rating of 9.14 so it's an amazing tale which I hope will be completed someday. I feel even incomplete it is still well worth reading.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by Erik Thread   [other reviews by Erik Thread]

Reviewed:


Random Writings has developed a wonderfully complex tale without it being too complicated. "The Private" grows and develops, adds characters and levels of meaning, but it keeps its basic story simple enough so the new elements add depth without confusing readers with too many complicated details.

In the first chapter we learn that the protagonist is a space Marine, a long-serving warrior, not by voluntary enlistment but in order to avoid the death penalty for a civilian crime. As part of the sentence, he will never be promoted to a higher rank. During his long career as a private, he has seen many battles, and has gained many skills and learned much and his valor is well documented by the medals he has won--a strange anomaly to see a lowly private's chest covered with decorations for courage and self-sacrifice. But he has also had to learn to keep to himself, not to have hope, not get close to others, and to be a loner. But there may be some changes a-brewin'.

What Random Writings does with the premise is marvelous in both its simplicity and complexity. You will enjoy it. Private Sweeney sort of reminds me of Jean Valjean from book one of Les Miserables. If you know the character, his transformations, his sacrifices, his head vs. heart trials, you will appreciate this tale even more.

The story moves along, but pays attention to detail, too. It's edited and proofread pretty well. Good relationships, but few sexy scenes. On a basic level, "The Private" is a very good space-action-war-drama, but there are deeper undercurrents that add spice and intrigue if you notice them.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
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