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Author's Description:
This story is about becoming a super hero. It is not so much about being a superhero.
Size: 778 KB (147,914 words)
Genre: Fantasy
Sex Contents: No Sex
Tags: Superhero

Review by Safe_Bet   [other reviews by Safe_Bet]

Reviewed:


Lions and tigers and rich military industrialists with telekinetic mind powers, a super suit, a supercomputer detective teammate that hacks into computers and snoops on cell phones who has a rich, beautiful girlfriend, elite military background, flawed past and dead, avenged parents... OH MY!

Just kidding!

There really aren't any lions or tigers. LOL

What there is makes you totally forget that fact, however. There is so much going on in this story that lions and tigers would have made it unbelievable! ::roll eyes::

Plot: Old guy dies, wakes up in the body of his great grand son, who died, but didn't die, who inherits billions from his parents who were killed by a street gang and who proceeds to get his revenge. Think Iron Man morfs into Batman who acts like Spiderman. Got that? No problem, right? Anyways, it SHOULD be a simple plot, but it has more legs than a centipede! Don't ask me how, but it works.

Technical: 'Sea-Life' is a pretty darn good writer, but a pretty lousy self-editor. WAAAAAY too many misspelled and incorrectly used words and many duplicated/"Gosh, I meant to replace that phrase" issues to make it one of the better stories on here. Sadly, those issues distracted me enough to make me mark this part of the review down substantially.

Appeal: This is not your average do-over, but is also well worth reading if you like that genre. If not for the technical issues this would be one of my all time favorite stories from a wonderful writer. In fact, even with the "ooopies" I highly recommend everyone read it.

P.S. When this writer says "no sex", he/she means it. You want to read this for the story, not the porn.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 6 | Appeal to Reviewer: 8
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