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My bus broke down on the way home from work one day. That's when I met Sally. Cute, intense, erotic Sally. It's not often we can pin down the moments that changed our lives, but that was one for me. Note: D/S is quite light.
Size: 99 KB (19,059 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, DomSub

Review by StephenT   [other reviews by StephenT]

Reviewed:


Dave goes to and from work by bus. Work is a job he doesn't fully enjoy due to an incompetent, bumbling and bully boss who "supervises" workers, but has no knowledge or understanding of their work.

On the trip home one day, the bus breaks down and the passengers have to wait for a replacement. Lucky Dave by chance meets Sally on the bus and ends up following her home on her request. At her home, things escalate rather quickly and is the subject of the book. Sally has a bit of a kink and their sexual relationship develops fairly quickly. You need to read the book to find out how this develops.

The book could be longer as we get to know Dave's character fairly well, but lacks a similar character development for Sally. We know she is an artist, but that is not expanded upon and that would make the story better.

Otherwise the story is well written and is enjoyable to read and leaves you wanting more.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
 

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