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Author's Description:
They say love is blind. I say lovers are blind, deaf and dumb. And they love it. Don't tell them what you saw. Or what you heard. Or know. They'll hate you for it.
Size: 114 KB (22,504 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, Cheating

Review by Andrew Johns   [other reviews by Andrew Johns]

Reviewed:


In "Love Is a Silk Blindfold", we have the story of a man who is deeply in love with his wife, but has just been advised by his best friend that his wife isn't faithful. What will he see when he looks? Will love blind him, or show him the truth? Read along and find out.

The sex in the story is mostly told in hindsight, and lacks any sense of stroke-worthy urgency. Also, the man's doubts about his wife's faithfulness takes all the joy out of the couplings. I don't consider this story stroke worthy, but then again, the story isn't a stroker.

The plot itself is actually quite good, though the hopping around made it more difficult to follow. Reading how the husband tries to find out what his wife is up to, and how things come together/fall apart was nice. I think the author did a very credible job of writing this scenario. The ending did leave a bit to be desired, in my opinion.

Technically, the story would have been fine, but there are tons of places where an extra space in the middle of a word throws the reader's eyes for a loop. I found myself going back to re-read many a sentence to make sure I got the word and meaning correct. It is obvious that a spell-checker was not used, as the two word parts never formed words of their own. There were also a few problems with formatting, most likely due to the use of French causing some weird characters to show up.

I liked the plot, except for its penchant for hopping back and forth so much. And the husband's internal thoughts were very candid and helped give the reader a real sense of where he was going and how he was feeling. But the really poor technical effort stole much of the probably enjoyment this story would have given me.

A re-run through an editor would clean up most of the typos in this story. If that was done, I'd probable give this story an 8 for overall appeal. As it stands, it gets a 5. If technical quality is important to you, I'll warn you to consider skipping this one, or waiting until the author cleans it up.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 3 | Appeal to Reviewer: 5
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