Michelle is a young gymnast, who has her first experience with drinking, pot, and an older guy. A halloween party at her older brother's place turns into an evening of firsts, and she must to her best to strech herself to these new experiences.
Size: 34 KB (6,452 words)
Genre: True Story
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/ft, Teenagers, Consensual, Size, Halloween
Review by Pleasure Boy 1 [other reviews by Pleasure Boy 1]
Reviewed:
I liked this story. A nice lot of tension. Just goes to show you a story doesn't have to be a massive fuck fest to be exciting. In fact, sometimes what doesn't happen can be more exciting than what's thrown up into your face.
The story's flow could use some smoothing out. Remove some scenes that don't need to be there, and stick with moving toward the main point of the story--Kevin and Michelle back at his place.
The actual sex scene was very nice. I loved the realism of it. It wasn't "girl goes nuts at boy's every touch" like you see in some stories. There was hesitation, awkwardness. There was reality. I also liked that Kevin wasn't all over her trying to nail her at the earliest permissible moment. He took his time. He was gentle and patient. I'm kinda hoping for a part II where his patience is rewarded with a bit of pleasure in return. You got me rooting for him to get some. Good job.
The spelling and grammar were impeccable. Two thumbs up for that.
Anyway, great first effort. I'll keep an eye out for your future works.
-PB1
