The blackness was complete. Somehow I wasn't afraid, though I felt that I ought to be. I just couldn't manage it. It was odd. I wondered where I was; the last time I had been in this sort of situation had been once in a sensory deprivation chamber. Perhaps that's where I was. I tried to remember how I had come to be here. Nothing. I couldn't remember anything. I felt fear then, but it was distant, a small thing, inconsequential...
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Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: No Sex
Tags: Romantic, Mystery, Slow
Review by burka_oz [other reviews by burka_oz]
Reviewed:
A tale with the difference. The gent is in constant darkness, a full sensory-deprivation kind of darkness. He starts to recall bubbles of time when he had been a saviour of the young lady next door. Often these episodes ended, not just in saving the young lady from whatever was going on, but he would find himself in for a tongue lashing from her mother who always assumed he had been the cause of her problems. These episodes exacerbated until serious injury was his "reward" for saving the young lady and others around them.
The tale spends most of its time as he goes through these episodes in the past and looks for what he could learn from them. Why was he running through them again? Why was the darkness slowly fading to grey?
This is a good tale describing his feelings of loss and confusion as he is trying to work his way out of the darkness. I believe it's well-written and follows a plot that has been planned beforehand. I didn't spot too many grammatical errors and nothing jumped out of me that I would change the order of in the paragraph or the events. It concludes in a very satisfying way and nicely closes off all plot threads.
How did I come across this tale written back in 2005? Maybe was serendipity? Maybe just luck? I was reading the comments to Al Steiner's latest story update when I saw there was a comment from "arty." Back in the dark ages "arty" was one of my favourite authors on the old A.A.S.T.R story site so I clicked on the member name and found all of these great stories.
I don't know if this is the same 'arty' that I used to follow on that old site, it could be? I hope it is because I enjoyed his writing and still do.
