I was eighteen and due to marry the boss's daughter, but her mother got to me first.
Size: 15 KB (3,090 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: mt/Fa, Teenagers, Consensual, True Story, InLaws, First, Oral Sex
Review by Belinda LaPage [other reviews by Belinda LaPage]
Reviewed:
John is ranch hand whose favorite pass time is to watch the boss's beautiful wife Ruth hang out the washing; reaching, stretching, bending over in her tight shorts and loose white blouse while John watches secretly from the outhouse.
Well the boss's daughter Beth is John's girlfriend and may one day be his wife. He calls ahead on his day off to ask whether he can take Beth on a date, sexy Ruth tells him yes, but when he arrives, Beth is gone. And so is the boss.
Ruth, it seems, wants to be sure John is the right man for her virgin daughter.
This stroke story is a first person narrative from John's POV, so it is going to play a lot better to men than to women, but even so, such are ALawer's descriptive talents, I felt all of Ruth's climaxes right along with her. Literally.
The account of John's first time was convincing, although the story wasn't really long enough to develop his character. Ruth's raw sexuality was genuine and beautiful.
PLOT: Good (7) - The farm hand / farmer's wife is good but not special in any way. That in no way devalues the story; this is a stroker; if you want plot then read a longer story that has time to develop a plot.
TECHNICAL: Great (9) - Minor spelling and grammar errors that only spoiled the mood in one place where there were two close together when things were getting hot.
APPEAL TO ME: Great (9) - The setup in the first half was a bit flat. Truthfully, I almost stopped reading thinking the sex would be average. I was very, VERY wrong. The sex was electric. The cunnilingus scene - told from the male POV - so beautifully conveyed the female passion, I could have happily come at that point. The penetration was deliciously slow and lovingly described; and then it built at a perfect pace to the phenomenally vivid climax.
VERDICT: Great (9) overall. Girls, don't dismiss this because of the male POV.
