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Author's Description:
The adventures of a halfelven as he tries to survive in a land where all of the kindred are to be killed. First chapter of a longer story.
Size: 478 KB (91,854 words)
Genre: Fantasy
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, mt/ft, Consensual, Romantic, Magic, Heterosexual, Fiction, First, Violent

Review by Vitruvian Manuel   [other reviews by Vitruvian Manuel]

Reviewed:


This is an interesting and entertaining story often marred by a distinct lack of dialogue.

The Bad:

The characters are mostly static, with a few exceptions. There are apparently many dragos, but only one is mentioned by name, and one other appears as an important part of the story.Tragedies happen to many, but since they mostly seem like plastic exchangeable soldiers, you never get much feeling from it. The lack of dialogue leaves the characters often feeling flat, and scenes pass too quickly as they are glossed over rather than being explored.

The Good:

The story is intellectually interesting. The main love affair is interesting and somewhat inventive, though it suffers from a lack of detail. The main character is interesting and conflicted. A few of the supporting roles are well filled by intriguingg actors; one, in particular, is interesting and shows solid growth through the story. The handful of subplots keep this from being too direct an a to b journey.

The Last Call:

I found this worth reading in the end, though the entire story is unforthnately cursed with a lack of detail and, frustratingly, such a simple thing as talking. Still, if you are more about story and plot instead of characters and description, this is probably worth some of your time.

--Manny

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: N/A | Appeal to Reviewer: 6
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