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Author's Description:
It's been one long night as his daughter's friends parade up and down the stairs in their too-sexy costumes. With the party winding down and most of the guests gone, he might just end up getting an unexpected Halloween treat of his own.
Size: 29 KB (5,647 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, BiSexual, Heterosexual, Oral Sex, Halloween

Review by Belinda LaPage   [other reviews by Belinda LaPage]

Reviewed:


One Incredible Costume is listed as 'Much Sex'. That's no lie, but I think it's more of a Stroke Story - which I don't hold to as high a standard for character/plot development - so that's how I'm going to review it.

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Our unnamed hero is a single dad who has endured the budding beauty of his 18-year-old daughter's friends over the last few years with a kind of stiff-backed stoic grace; unable not to look, but always aware that his attention would be unwanted.

Dani (the daughter) is hosting Halloween this year and it seems as though every friend has worn a 'sexy' costume: sexy Snow White, Black Widow, and then there's Amy, dressed in a tight, red and black Incredibles costume. It's like she *wants* him to look.

At the end of the night, the party-goers have been tucked in where they passed out or helped out the door, and now Amy is alone with our narrator ... a moment for which she has been longing for some time.

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I came so hard reading this, I had to keep wiping tears from my eyes. The descriptive language used was sublime.

Most heterosexual erotica uses a male narrator and this is no different. Where it excels is in the way it describes Amy's *reactions*; it's almost as though the experience of the narrator is secondary, somehow we are getting a direct feed of Amy's cataclysmic orgasm that almost feels as though she is describing it herself.

The result is astonishingly erotic. I'm still tingling as I write this review more than an hour later.

PLOT: 8 (Very Good) - I don't require much plot from a Stroke Story ... heck, I don't require any. If the sex is good enough then I'm OK if a stroke story jumps right in. This story did offer a little in the way of plot, mostly as a way to justify Amy's fetish costume, which was Very Good (hence the 8). Why wasn't it Great? Or Amazing? I would have loved if there was a bit more reason to get them into bed together. It felt rushed.

TECHNICAL: 10 (Amazing) - Beautifully written, and beautifully edited. The pace was perfect and so was the tone.

APPEAL TO ME: 10 (Amazing) - Oh goodness, just so hot. I was almost tempted to knock off a mark because some of Amy's sexy dialogue didn't ring true to me, like "Wow, you have a big fucking cock". But seriously, there was only a couple of places and ... did I mention how hard I came?

VERDICT: 10 (Amazing) - Oh yes, you must read this. Especially you girls.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
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