Forum: Story Discussion and Feedback

The right to criticize something does not depend on your other beliefs.

The right to express oneself is a human right of the first order (Cf US Constitution, Amendment I, as one example; other constitutions have similar provisions). It does not and cannot depend on the willingness of the hearer, or on their feelings, emotions, or sensitivities.

That said, while you are free to express yourself, you are not free from social consequences for that expression (e.g. being fired, being refused entry onto private property, losing friends, etc).

You get to have an opinion

Not in the cancel culture world. Thankfully, people and corporations are waking up from that nighmare.

Yeah, you can use whatever pronouns you want, but don't get pissed if I don't buy into that game. In the back of an ambulance for over 20 years, I didn't care, and I don't care now...

Given REP's standing and sensibility along with my own experience of scoring and reader foibles, and how in this case they are of similar impression. I would definitely suggest that the brutal truth of the matter is as Rep says (I've not read your work, so can't definitively say, but the sharp drop off in readers as the story progresses, along with the drop in both votes and score -Book four being an outlier - is a massive red flag).

These topics have been the mainstay of your prior books. The topics have been run into the ground. You need to introduce new topics

Which is the more polite way of saying 'Your story is now boring'. The good thing is, you were obviously already worried about that to mention it in the first place, so it should be easier for you to change tack and course correct. Or if you are brave enough, to go back, edit, course change and re-post. :)

These topics have been the mainstay of your prior books

Lubrican is very successful and all (most?) of his stories deal with women getting pregnant.

all (most?) of his stories deal with women getting pregnant.

In the story, the MC is the only adult male that lives in the valley. I have forgotten the exact number of single females in the valley but it is somewhere over 30, and the majority of the female population are under about 18. A large number of those under 18 teenagers have given birth to one or more of the MC's children or are currently pregnant by the MC, and the girls under 14 are waiting until they are old enough for the MC to impregnate them. I recall there being somewhere around 15 children who have the MC as their father. The MC tries to find husbands for the young mothers. There have been numerous similar discussions about the situation in the valley with each repeating significant amounts of the prior discussions to lay the foundation for the current discussion.

This situation is significantly different than pregnancies in Lubrican's multiple stories addressing pregnancies.

and the girls under 14 are waiting until they are old enough for the MC to impregnate them.

That is, old enough for SOL to allow it. hahahaha

And now there are 20 votes - score 6.22

If only I were that good at predicting the lottery :-(

AJ