Banadin: Blog

One email got my attention today, it was mentioned that at times my stories read like an outline. They do not bring you into the now. Even more telling is my greatest critics comment (My wife),she likes to visualize the story as she goes. She has to work to hard for most of my people to come alive. From Chapter 4 on I hope you will see an improvement. I only took up writing three weeks ago. This was a result of a long driving trip where I started to make up and share the story with my wife. She challenged me to write it down. I think she is working on the idle hands are the devils tools since I am taking the winter off.

An Anon reader pointed out that in the Summer Vacation story I had Rick flying on a Boeing 707. They did not come out till October of 1958 and that was with PanAm.

That was not a critical point to the story so I did not check. Shame on me. For the record after checking Eastern never owned any 707'2. They were DC 8 or 1011's. Double shame on me because I fly Eastern a lot in the late 60's and until they closed in 1991. Thanks for the heads up.

Thank you for all the kind comments and possible leads to new direction.

I would especially like to thank the anonymous poster for the language corrections. They are fairly good. Well the person said my story was fairly good. So were their corrections. Except for one, missed the boat on a word definition. Rather than explain it here, read Ninth Grade 1958-1959 to see what was wrong.

Actually I do not mind having my errors pointed out. I am trying to learn. It has 56 years since freshman English.

Well you missed your chances. I posted My Summer Vacation 1958 and had no negative emails. The score seems reasonable for a first effort so I am writing more. I give great Thanks to my wife for her proof reading and editing.