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jhncanson
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Anyone know a coming of age story, wherein a boy, doesn't necessarily have to be handsome but has to have the unique factor in him that makes him special to girls.

Yea, so basically i am looking for an erotica story but without too much stroke as those tend to get boring the more you read into them.

Don't suggest mind control please, as they are the same as slavery/rape in my eyes.
Mind control for me is less satisfactory when read than other erotica stories where the protag would seduce someone. Thats just my opinion or maybe my ego talking.

Wheezer

@jhncanson

but has to have the unique factor in him that makes him special to girls


Is "unique factor" a euphemism for "big dick that stays hard?" :P

Replies:   jhnmakii
awnlee jawking

@jhncanson

I don't know what will float your boat but I can recommend some authors for you to try, if you haven't already, whose stories contain plots and decent depth of characterisation besides erotic scenes:

aroslav

bluedragon

Cold Creek

G Younger

Penguintopia

AJ

jhnmakii
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@Wheezer

Could be. To be honest, i'm looking for stories where an mc 'evolves', could be a physical change, emotional change, it depends so long as the story is good.

Stories or erotica where the mc has a 'big' dick and 'eternal' hard-on often goes downhill after a few chapters.

Replies:   richardshagrin
Crumbly Writer

If you haven't read mine yet, you might consider my "Catalyst" series. It's not so much a "Coming of Age" as a "Dealing with a New Reality" for a teenage main character. The protagonist, Alex, finds women drawn to him for unknown reason, and he slowly uncovers a variety of unique powers as he struggles to understand what's happening to him and those around him.

The sex is fairly minor to the story plot (i.e. it doesn't account for much of the story), but the entire plot revolves around the attraction of people to the MC.

On the other hand, few of my stories actually take place in high school, other than a random setting.

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Ernest Bywater

@Crumbly Writer

Could be. To be honest, i'm looking for stories where an mc 'evolves', could be a physical change, emotional change, it depends so long as the story is good.


There's a bit of that in some of my stories involving teens, although I see them as mostly action stories. Finding Home is a lot of action around the mental adjustments a young man makes in his life after it's destroyed. A similar theme is in some of the other stories I've linked to below.

http://storiesonline.net/s/66183/finding-home

http://storiesonline.net/s/11363/mack-coming-of-age-story

http://storiesonline.net/s/67755/star-performance

http://storiesonline.net/s/11052/odd-man-in-college

http://storiesonline.net/s/11493/interesting-times

http://storiesonline.net/s/59645/rough-diamond

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jhncanson

Are there good drama stories here dealing with a young man raising his child alone?

I just read the story of where the protag agrees to marry his bestfriend to raise her 'accident' child and falls inlove with the child(not romantically, no pedo). He calls her sweety. I'm not sure about the title but its 'crying myself to sleep' i think it was a song title.

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awnlee jawking

@jhncanson


Don't suggest mind control please, as they are the same as slavery/rape in my eyes.


Some years ago I started writing, but never finished, a sprawling story in which the protagonist gains possession of an alien mind-control device. He uses it on a teenager he finds trying to rob him, and to his surprise, discovers the teenager is a girl who's been dealt a really bad hand in life. Using the device to keep the girl from fleeing, he gets her cleaned up while laundering her clothes, then gives her a decent meal. Clean and full for the first time in years, the girl starts to feel horny. That feeds back to the protagonist who starts to feel horny too, which in turn feeds back to the girl etc until they lose control and have mind-blowing sex. Afterwards they both feel intense shame and struggle to cope with the consequences.

Neither party could be said to have consented to sex of their own free will, so just who raped whom?

I'm sorry you can't actually read the story but I think it shows that mind-control stories needn't just involve simplistic rapes.

AJ

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jhncanson

@awnlee jawking

There are probably exceptions but mind control stories that i read are written purely for stroke value.

MC stories are very interesting if done right but the problem i have with that is that after the protag goes slaving pretty girls/popular girls he has to save the world.

awnlee jawking

@jhncanson


Are there good drama stories here dealing with a young man raising his child alone?


You'll probably find something along those lines amongst DeeBee's stories.

AJ

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jhncanson

@awnlee jawking

is it, Whatever It Costs?

I can't deal with parenthood as it deals with cheating wives.

I've been reading many stories of that in a week last week so i'm taking a break from cheating wives stories, most of em are for stroke value anyways.

Replies:   awnlee jawking
Capt Zapp

@awnlee jawking

I think I would have enjoyed reading this story.

This sounds like an interesting premise with the person finding the device getting caught in a feedback loop.

Ernest Bywater

@jhncanson

Don't suggest mind control please,


Funny about this. I'm in the middle of writing a story where the main character has the opportunity to use drugs to mind control people, but is hesitant to do so, and when he does use them on a few people sex is not the main thing he uses it for. It's going to be a while until I get it done, because I'm working on a dozen or so projects at the same time.

jhncanson
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@Ernest Bywater

That's very good to hear.

Just a question though, will there be a situation wherein he uses the ability to be financially stable or more than stable? That would be interesting.

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Ernest Bywater
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@jhncanson


ability to be financially stable or more than stable?


sort of. He's offered the drugs to get revenge on some people, but finds revenge isn't all that sweet. However, he does test the drugs, and then uses them to protect some people, and uses the people to enhance his business - he's a photographer. I've thought of him getting sexually involved with people he controls, and also thought of not having him do that - still undecided on that, but the story will be either no sex or some sex, so it's a minor aspect.

edit to add: The focus is his 'moral' dilemma and how he helps others. The main story line is worked out, but not all the sub-plots and minor activities are fully developed.

richardshagrin
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@jhnmakii


Stories or erotica where the mc has a 'big' dick and 'eternal' hard-on often goes downhill after a few chapters


I don't know of any that start high enough to go downhill. On the otherhand, they dig their way down past the root cellar to the subway. And all the girls are subs. Submissive, not submarines. I don't want to offend anyone, but the though of submissive Marines seems like one of those oxymorons.

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samuelmichaels
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@jhncanson

Doing it all Over by Al Steiner might fit the bill. It's a do-over, with the protagonist reliving his high school experience. His unique facror is, of course, his life experience and knowledge, which makes it easy to attract girls. He also grows and changes over the course of his second youth.

awnlee jawking

@jhncanson

DeeBee's stories seem to have many characteristics in common, including cheating.

Since you know what you want to read, why not try to write the story yourself? I'm sure you'll find lots of volunteers here prepared to help you polish the story if you're not confident of your writing skills.

AJ

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jhncanson
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@awnlee jawking

I can easily write, its just i don't know how to start it.

I've tried my hand at high-fantasy novels that are focused on action but i couldn't seem to start it right. I guess my problem is the execution part.

I've accepted this as a sign that i'm more suited to be a reader than a writer.

Crumbly Writer

@Ernest Bywater

There's a bit of that in some of my stories involving teens, although I see them as mostly action stories. Finding Home is a lot of action around the mental adjustments a young man makes in his life after it's destroyed. A similar theme is in some of the other stories I've linked to below.

Uh, the quote wasn't mine.

Crumbly Writer

@Ernest Bywater

Funny about this. I'm in the middle of writing a story where the main character has the opportunity to use drugs to mind control people, but is hesitant to do so, and when he does use them on a few people sex is not the main thing he uses it for. It's going to be a while until I get it done, because I'm working on a dozen or so projects at the same time.

I'm contemplating a similar story where a detective is investigating the use of a 'sex drug' as a terrorist device (i.e. making Western culture appear corrupt). Though there's no 'enslavement' involved, it gets into the different perspective of different cultures, and how a single event has multiple interpretations.

Crumbly Writer

@jhncanson

I've accepted this as a sign that i'm more suited to be a reader than a writer.

All that takes is reading the right story and thinking "I can do a better job than this joker did!" It's amazing how such a response takes on a life of it's own. That's how many authors got their start here.

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jhnmakii

@Crumbly Writer

I tried my hand at writing, but it seems to me like i have so many ideas i want to write and i don't have any long term plans, its like every new chapter i wrote was recently written with little edits so the further i am in the story the more edits i make and i post them.

I started out on royalroadl and ended up here.

jhnmakii

Anyone know a lighthearted story about child rearing of a single father, could be teen or teen-adult or middle aged, so long as he is a single father, i would prefer the mother died.

Replies:   Capt Zapp
awnlee jawking

@Ernest Bywater

Didn't mind-control drugs feature in a time-travel western you recently uploaded?

AJ

Ernest Bywater

@awnlee jawking

Didn't mind-control drugs feature in a time-travel western you recently uploaded?


The modern day people were using brainwashing drugs on people they wanted to send back as slaves, but the main character had been desensitised to them and they had no effect. The story is several years old and only just reaching SoL due to contractual arrangements with an e-publisher.

docholladay

@awnlee jawking

Didn't mind-control drugs feature in a time-travel western you recently uploaded?


They were used by the kidnappers but failed. In fact the MC turned their systems against them before being shipped back in time. He then went on to destroy their people in that time period.

Replies:   awnlee jawking
Capt Zapp

@jhnmakii

Anyone know a lighthearted story about child rearing of a single father, could be teen or teen-adult or middle aged, so long as he is a single father, i would prefer the mother died.


You might want to make this a new post so it attracts attention instead of being buried deep in another topic.

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jhnmakii

@Capt Zapp

I try not to post more new posts as i don't want to be seen as a spammer.

Dominions Son

@jhnmakii

I try not to post more new posts as i don't want to be seen as a spammer.


You are more likely to be seen as a spammer by thread bombing off topic requests.

awnlee jawking

@jhnmakii

You'd be doing readers a favour because they could locate the forum thread by meaningful title and navigate to any story recommendations.

AJ

awnlee jawking

@docholladay

Found it - 'Stand In Time'. Protocol fifty-three seemed to veer towards sexual slavery to me.

AJ

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sejintenej

@jhncanson

Anyone know a coming of age story, wherein a boy, doesn't necessarily have to be handsome but has to have the unique factor in him that makes him special to girls.

Yea, so basically i am looking for an erotica story but without too much stroke as those tend to get boring the more you read into them.

Don't suggest mind control please, as they are the same as slavery/rape in my eyes.

Mind control for me is less satisfactory when read than other erotica stories where the protag would seduce someone.


OK, so what don't you really dislike about mind control?

I have just finished reading ( for the umpteenth time) a story about the life of a young man who is attractive to women and has an aura (but there is no rape - just loving love making in college and subsequently).
In the second half of the story he takes a journey through 22 countries and the world's press are trying and spectacularly failing to find him in every town and village; their minds are being controlled - by the Gods and Goddesses.

You have the "unique factor", the mild "erotica" and the "mind control" which is totally different from any other story I have seen. Try http://storiesonline.net/s/43294:i

Bondi Beach
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@jhncanson


I can easily write, its just i don't know how to start it.


At the beginning, of course ... (hahaha)

The "beginning" can be anywhere or anywhen you like. Take a second look at a story you really liked and---without getting all lit crit about it---see what the author did and give that a whirl EDIT: in your own story.

Sure, maybe writing them won't be your thing, but pushing on through could lead to something interesting and fun.

Good luck!

bb

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Dominions Son

@Bondi Beach

At the beginning, of course ... (hahaha)


Oh sure. He asks how and you tell him where. You are so helpful.

Replies:   Bondi Beach
Ernest Bywater

@awnlee jawking

Found it - 'Stand In Time'. Protocol fifty-three seemed to veer towards sexual slavery to me.


The original program has sexual slavery, but protocol 53 doesn't have any effect until they choose to have sex with someone, then it enforces fidelity. Since the person gets to chose who it applies to it's not slavery.

Replies:   awnlee jawking
awnlee jawking

@Ernest Bywater

IIRC the protagonist only applies it to women, and it certainly precludes any trying before buying.

AJ

sejintenej

@jhncanson

I can easily write, its just i don't know how to start it.


Open a dictionary and use a pin to find a random word.
Write that word down; it is the first word in a story of a thousand words (to misquote Mao Tse Tung)

You have started; now weave thoughts around that word - logical words, historical words, sci fi words, romantic words, anything - it doesn't matter

Replies:   Bondi Beach
Bondi Beach
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@Dominions Son


Oh sure. He asks how and you tell him where. You are so helpful.


If it's a joke, your comment is mildly funny. If it isn't, quite clearly you didn't read my EDIT: third sentence.

bb

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tppm

@jhnmakii

I try not to post more new posts as i don't want to be seen as a spammer.


So, instead you hijack an existing thread.

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tppm
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@jhncanson


I can easily write, its just i don't know how to start it.

I've tried my hand at high-fantasy novels that are focused on action but i couldn't seem to start it right. I guess my problem is the execution part.

I've accepted this as a sign that i'm more suited to be a reader than a writer.


It was a dark and stormy night. A shot rang out! (Feel free to take over from there.)

awnlee_jawking

@tppm


It was a dark and stormy night. A shot rang out!


When my six-year-old daughter relinquished control of my mind, I realised she had just made me kill my own wife. And my wife hadn't even been cheating on me!

AJ

Replies:   Dominions Son
Bondi Beach

@tppm

It was a dark and stormy night. A shot rang out! (Feel free to take over from there.)


For example:

"Hard-boiled private dick Harrison Bogart couldn't tell if it was the third big glass of cheap whiskey he'd just finished, or the way the rain-moistened blouse clung so tightly to the perfect figure of the dame who just appeared panting in his office doorway, but he was certain of one thing … he had the hottest mother-in-law in the world."

- Carl Turney, Bayswater, Victoria, Australia. Winner of the 2014 Bulwer-Lytton award for best opening sentence in the Crime category.

bb

Crumbly Writer

@tppm

It was a dark and stormy night. A shot rang out! (Feel free to take over from there.)

On this site, it's more likely:

It was a dark and stormy dick, three shots rang out, splattering orgasms all around.

Bondi Beach

@sejintenej

You have started; now weave thoughts around that word - logical words, historical words, sci fi words, romantic words, anything - it doesn't matter


Example:
"Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious!" she shouted, and in a second Mr. Banks had Mary Poppins on her back and was balls-deep in her sweet pussy.

bb

Dominions Son

@Bondi Beach

If it's a joke, your comment is mildly funny.


:)

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Dominions Son

@awnlee_jawking

When my six-year-old daughter relinquished control of my mind, I realised she had just made me kill my own wife. And my wife hadn't even been cheating on me!


I backed away as her body began to melt.

Replies:   Bondi Beach
Bondi Beach

@Dominions Son

:)


Nice one!

bb

Bondi Beach

@Dominions Son

I backed away as her body began to melt.


My daughter laughed as her mother turned into melted butter. The kid always liked pancakes on Saturday mornings.

bb

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awnlee jawking

@Bondi Beach


My daughter laughed as her mother turned into melted butter. The kid always liked pancakes on Saturday mornings.


While there was still time, I mind-melt my recently deceased Vulcan wife. Perhaps the two of us together could resist our daughter's mind-control.

AJ

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jhnmakii2nd

@tppm

I have 3 accounts altogether due to the 16 story limits.

You can already guess which accounts they are.

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Crumbly Writer

@jhnmakii2nd

I have 3 accounts altogether due to the 16 story limits.

Another good reason to turn to writing. Once you cross the magic threshold, you earn premiere status.

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jhnmakii2nd
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@Crumbly Writer

You get premier membership by submitting your own story?

There's gotta be more to it though, or people would just submit various spams as stories for the membership.

Ernest Bywater

@jhnmakii2nd

There's gotta be more to it though, or people would just submit various spams as stories for the membership.


The moderators check each story submitted for many things, and if they decide it's total crap it gets sent back to the author, mind you, politcal speeches almost qualify as acceptable so it ha to be little more than spam to get refused.

Bondi Beach

@jhnmakii2nd

You get premier membership by submitting your own story?

There's gotta be more to it though, or people would just submit various spams as stories for the membership.


The "more" is the scores your stories receive. It's not straight quantity. Can't find the page right now, but the explanation is on the site somewhere.

bb

sejintenej
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@tppm


It was a dark and stormy night.


Oh fuck. I must have been so pissed last night knocking back akvavit and beer with Helge and Sverre like it was going out of fashion. How in tarnation can anyone use that phrase in a story? What was I thinking about?

It was the last day of their two week holiday and we had covered the best of the Jotunheimen; today they with Babill, Sverre's tiny girlfriend, have to take the train back to university and I have to get back to the Jotunheimen to pick up a new party. That's going to be tough - a hundred and seventy miles, three big climbs and I have to be there by noon tomorrow.

A half-decent author (certainly not me) can make something of the worst of phrases!

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Bondi Beach

@sejintenej

It was the last day of their two week holiday and we had covered the best of the Jotunheimen; today they with Babill, Sverre's tiny girlfriend, have to take the train back to university and I have to get back to the Jotunheimen to pick up a new party. That's going to be tough - a hundred and seventy miles, three big climbs and I have to be there by noon tomorrow.


Was it raining?

bb

awnlee jawking

@Bondi Beach


Was it raining?


It was a dark and stormy night.

AJ

Replies:   Ernest Bywater
tppm

@awnlee jawking

While there was still time, I mind-melt my recently deceased Vulcan wife. Perhaps the two of us together could resist our daughter's mind-control.


I muttered, to my wife's melded mind, "That was highly illogical of you, to melt into butter. I don't know if we'll last another year, till her first Pon-Far. Who knew a Vulcon-Betazoid hybrid would be so much trouble."

Ernest Bywater

@awnlee jawking

It was a dark and stormy night.


It was a stark and dormy night, as they huddled in the college housing common room on the third night of the blizzard. All were upset because it was a Friday night and they were stuck in the dorm ......

There's a start for you.

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sejintenej

@Bondi Beach

Was it raining?

25°C below, 4 or 5 metres of snow! Anyways that was what he wrote (and regretted)), not what he had to face

sejintenej

@Ernest Bywater

It was a stark and dormy night, as they huddled in the college housing common room on the third night of the blizzard. All were upset because it was a Friday night and they were stuck in the dorm ......

There's a start for you.


Aha, the clash of cymbals, the thud of the big base drum, the screech of the violins and the Maestro strikes again!

That's why I gave up writing decades ago

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OregonDucks

@jhncanson

Does anybody know what "A Well-Lived Life series by Penguintopia" is about? Spoilers are ok and pros and cons.

http://storiesonline.net/series/1167/a-well-lived-life

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nihility

@OregonDucks

The story description is pretty accurate. Computer/chess nerd grows into an adult. Ladies love him because he is a nice guy and good in the sack. It is a harem story, but done well. 2nd-tier girls move out of the story after a time, in a natural way, so that after a few years there aren't a couple dozen characters that you don't remember and don't care about (why I abandoned a similar story). Excellent take on something that has been done a number of times. Well worth your time.

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OregonDucks

@nihility

What makes the main character unique? Is there a story or is it almost all about sex?

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MarissaHorne

@OregonDucks

The authors tagline for AWLL1 is "The life and loves of a young man from high school through college." In that time the hero supposedly has sex with some seventy-five women / girls.

It's supposed to be about three and a half million words, and there's plenty of room for all those girls and a lot of non-sex encounters too.

AWLL1 ends not with college graduation but about six months later, after he has founded his own business, married and honeymooned.

There is now a sequel, AWLL 2, which starts with his return from honeymoon and entering the business world full time. Don't mix them up, but the only thing that will do to you is confuse you.

A lot of the drive in AWLL1 is "Who will Steve marry?" Unsurprisingly this is not a mystery in AWLL2.

Try it and see.

richardshagrin

@sejintenej

Aha, the clash of cymbals, the thud of the big base drum, the screech of the violins and the Maestro strikes again!


You need a saxophone in the orchestra so the story will have sax and violins.

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Dominions Son

@richardshagrin

You need a saxophone in the orchestra so the story will have sax and violins.


And it needs to take place on top of a giant television, so you will have sax and violins on TV. :)

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nihility

@OregonDucks

Unique is a bit of a stretch, but among the things that make the main character uncommon, especially in this type of story, are that he plays no sports, is not supernaturally gifted athletically nor intellectually nor in his jockeys. While there is a good deal of sex, it is fairly well done, and there is plenty of room left for an actual story and organic character development.

Bondi Beach

@richardshagrin

I don't want to offend anyone, but the though of submissive Marines seems like one of those oxymorons.


My younger girl did her undergraduate work at a college founded by Quakers. College leaders noted to us parents at orientation that the use of the term "Fighting Quakers" for the school's teams was a little awkward and not officially sanctioned by the college.

bb

Wheezer
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@Dominions Son


@richardshagrin

You need a saxophone in the orchestra so the story will have sax and violins.

And it needs to take place on top of a giant television, so you will have sax and violins on TV. :)

Both of you two need to be severely beaten... :^P

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Capt Zapp

@Dominions Son

And it needs to take place on top of a giant television, so you will have sax and violins on TV. :)


And you could have a follow-up about young people in China. That would allow you do discuss the topic of Youth in Asia.
;p

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Dominions Son

@Capt Zapp

And you could have a follow-up about young people in China. That would allow you do discuss the topic of Youth in Asia.


And commercials with a Firestone shop offering bags of hard candy to to customers, so people can prepare for re-tire mints.

Not_a_ID

@Wheezer

Both of you two need to be severely beaten... :^P


Just beware of the sax-appeal.

Zom
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And in the kitchen, avoid the wontons trumpet.

OregonDucks

Whats good and bad about The Grim Reaper by rlfj? Why doesn't have such a high score?

Spoilers welcome!!

Replies:   ustourist
ustourist

@OregonDucks

Do you mean why does it, or why doesn't it, have such a high score? I think 9.1 is a bit lower than it deserves, but with over 5,000 votes, it is still a heck of a score to achieve.
The author is a good writer and storyteller who does a lot of research for accuracy.
Good points: well written, believable dialogue and situations, characters you get involved with, and a very entertaining story.
Bad points, possibly wrapped up a bit too fast and neatly, but it hardly detracts from the enjoyment of it.
Sorry, no spoilers, why not just read it and stop if you don't like the way it is going.

OregonDucks

yeah why does it have such a high score?

Replies:   docholladay
richardshagrin

Well, its really long. If you decide to read all of it, likely you are enjoying it, and when you reach the end, you want to reward the writer for an entertaining experience. There are some other really long stories, something about wolves and dragons of the blood, where the scores tend to follow the same principle, people who made it all the way through like the story. Those that fell along the way, or never even started it, didn't vote.

docholladay

@OregonDucks

Heck forget the darn score. The question is simple: "Do you like the story enough to read it?"

Scores and everything else serves only to help narrow the number of available choices down to a small number. Otherwise for any given genre or codes you will have potentially hundreds of available stories. Don't worry about why one story has higher scores than you would have thought appropriate. Either read it or not, that is your option.

Anomandaris
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rlfj writes solid stories, with good plot and characters that you end up caring about. Some of the scenes in The Grim Reaper dealing with PTSD literally brought me to tears.

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