Second Chance by Number 7

Author's Description:
43 year old Carl watched helplessly as Death came for him in the form of an overloaded produce truck. Suddenly he found himself in the body of a 14 year old boy, injured in the same accident. Now Carl had to learn how to live as Brian and cope with a new life and a loving mother.
Size: 7257 KB ( ~ 1,376,142 words)
In Progress
Genre: Fiction
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: mt/Fa, Consensual, Science Fiction, DoOver, Incest, Mother, Son, First, Oral Sex, Anal Sex, Masturbation, Petting

Review by manddscott   [other reviews by manddscott]

Reviewed: 2016-05-01

This is my first review in a while, but that is because this story is huge, and not done yet. This is a do-over story that is more than just that. A man dies in a crash, only to find his being is transported into the body of a boy who was in another vehicle in the same crash. The first book (out of 11 completed so far) is solely about that existence. When that body ends up getting killed, the man wakes up in the body of someone else (and another book starts). He ultimately figures out that he is a "fixer" for a universe that keeps moving him from body to body, allowing him to save certain people before getting killed again. In the process, he wins the World Series, becomes the President, kills terrorists, etc. In book 11, his consciousness is moved into a female body, to add even more twists.

For a plot score, this one is so convoluted that it deserves an A (8). Although the sex scenes early in the story almost interfere with the tale itself, the author learns to minimize the details as the story progresses.

Technical quality is where the story needs some help. It is replete with grammatical or other errors, from missing or extra words, to misused or misspelled words. As such, it earns an average score only (6).

For appeal, I give it a B+(7). After 11 books of reading what is a twist after another twist, the story is simply dragging on a bit more than I would prefer. I like long stories, but this one has over 400 chapters already, and is more than 5 MB in size. It might have received a higher score if I had not read it all through in one go. I would recommend reading no more than one "book" at a time, but the very first one is 85 chapters, while others have as few as 7.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 6 | Appeal to Reviewer: 7

Review by RabbiRabbit   [other reviews by RabbiRabbit]

Reviewed: 2014-12-30 - (Review Updated: 2014-12-30)

I would have written this review a few days ago, I just couldn't think of how to describe it; an analogy will have to do.

The plot:

Go to Google, in the upper right click on Images, hit Enter and then type in The Burma Road. The story is NOT about supplying the Nationalist forces in China during World War II, it is what the Burma Road looks like, that is the best way to describe the plot. The Burma Road was built the way it was so the Japanese couldn't strafe the supply convoys. The plot of Second Chance resembles the Burma Road in that you never know what is beyond the next turn and there are a lot of next turns. Just when you settle in for a marginally straight forward bit of plot, the plot decides that straight forward is not where it wants to go.

The scales of judgement:

On one side of the scale are things that under normal circumstance would have seen me quit the story: typos, poor word usage, more typos, mixed up sentences, missing words, and generally no proofreading.

On the other side of the scale are 207 chapters in 207 days, given a one or two day miscount. So the reason for the general lack of proofreading is the Number 7 chose to get the story out rather than fix it up so it got a good grade from his teacher.

As I weigh the bad typing against the total dependability of reading a new chapter in this wonderful story everyday I come down on the side of fuck the typing, post daily.

Roust posts a chapter in "Arlene and Jeff" every Friday, dependable as could be; he is only posting once a week, so there are few if any typos in his 300+ chapters. Number 7 made a different choice and I am as glad of it as I am of Roust's choice: different strokes and all that.

I review stories I like before they are finished in the hope of encouraging others to get on board. I read this story when it had maybe ten chapters finished and frankly thought it was repetitive and I stopped reading. I started reading again when when the story reached about 100 chapters, and the score kept rising; I figured my first impression was made in haste and I was right, I had been wrong.

Go read the story and ignore the bad typing.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 7 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10