Hell Followed With Him by Michael Erickston

Author's Description:
A man doing what he has to do to keep his family safe.
Size: 86 KB ( ~ 16,308 words)
Genre: Drama
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, NonConsensual, Rape, Heterosexual, Fiction, Revenge, Interracial, Black Female, White Male, First, Violent

Review by Jim S   [other reviews by Jim S]

Reviewed: 2017-11-04

As you can probably surmise from the description and codes, this is a story of revenge for a wrong done to a family. Another one of those stories built around the idea that sometimes justice needs a little nudge when the judicial system is likely to fall short.

I'm partial to these types of stories so I'm a little bit sorry that this one left me feeling unsatisfied. Not from the story (it is excellent) but in the telling. Dialogue is weak, at times being unrealistic as well as choppy and abrupt. Not all the time but enough to be noticeable. Other than that, technically, the story is fine. No obvious spelling or grammatical errors that stay with me, i.e. nothing egregious. Character development is also good, at least for the main characters. It is easy to develop some empathy for them.

It's a decent read; I recommend it if you tolerate the dialogue. Especially for those like myself that enjoy stories of justice being properly applied.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 6 | Appeal to Reviewer: 7