Author's Description:
This will be brief. This is a story of young girl who get a birthday gift to soon. A present to be delivered on her 12th birthday was given her just before her 10th. Because of this she goes blind. Two years later she wakes up one night to find that she now can sense everything around her in piche darkness. Thoush she is still blind she can see everything.
Size: 330 KB (63,683 words)
Genre: Science Fiction
Sex Contents: No Sex
Tags: gi, Heterosexual, Fiction, Science Fiction, Extra Sensory Perception, Paranormal, Slow, School

Review by Teloz   [other reviews by Teloz]

Reviewed:


This is a great story, but...

There's always a but, and in this case it's the editing that's the problem. Using the word 'felled' instead of falling, or fell, does not show promise. The language is sometimes stilted, and the punctuation, in places, is quite odd.

Having said all that, the redeeming feature is that Blind Sight really is a great story, and for that reason, much can be forgiven. It's well worth trying to read around the inconsistencies, the story is worth the effort.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 6 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
 

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