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Author's Description:
Tom Patterson stopped aging after an accident in 1959 when he was thirty years old. The same accident made him a telepath. Not aging presents problems. Tom must stage his death and start over about every twenty-five years with a new identity, which means he can't grow old with his women. When he is seventy-six, he starts a new life as Clint Wayne, a life he plans to spend in quiet contemplation at a small horse ranch in Arizona. Will he find love and happiness?
Size: 733 KB (135,836 words)
Genre: Science Fiction
Sex Contents: Minimal Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, Rape, Science Fiction, Slow, Violent

Review by Mythic Shadow   [other reviews by Mythic Shadow]

Reviewed:


Long Life and Telepathy is great ESP story. What I love about the story is that the realism with which Paul wrote the story. The protagonist is not all-knowing and all-powerful, but has a limited use in his ability, which gives him hardships to overcome, rather than steamrolling through life.

On the technical side the biggest flaw in the story the transitioning between scenes. The author could have used divider bars or bold titles to indicate when the scene changes during chapters. It would have made the story easier to follow during the transitions, instead of leaving me confused for a line or two whenever it happened. Otherwise, it is technically sound.

The plot is refreshing and it makes sense how the story was cut up in various parts. I never like giving away too much of the plot, but the plot was nice to follow. There was a lot of foreshadowing, however, which made you anticipate some of the story lines.

I quite enjoyed the humor that Paul brought to this story and I can recommend giving the story a read.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9

Review by Jim S   [other reviews by Jim S]

Reviewed:


This story was written across a nine month period in 2011. As of this writing, it is rated 8.53 and fully deserves the same.

This story has two main strengths. First, it is a good story. It moves actively from a humble beginning to a humble end. The action between these two poles is fast paced and will keep your attention. I know it kept mine.

The second strength is character development. Paul Phenomenon took the time to even develop some of the minor characters. And by taking time I mean taking a half chapter doing so. And it's worth it as the character development lends force to the action taken by the characters later in the story.

The only negative that I can mention is sequencing; sometimes the character acts before he/she is fully developed. It's a minor problem though,and not enough to take away from a full enjoyment of the story.

It's a great story and hard to put down once you start. Take the time.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
 

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