A young Army MP takes a shot at the ice princess. The stunningly beautiful Linda had shot down every guy before him, so he takes a different approach.
Size: 54 KB (10,767 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, Heterosexual, Humor, Oral Sex, Petting, Size, Big Breasts, Slow, Caution, Military
Review by anim8ed [other reviews by anim8ed]
Reviewed: - (Review Updated: )
I have to wonder what ever happened to Izzy McMaster? He writes one story and all indications he planned on more. Five years later and nothing more is seen from his pen. That is a real shame as this is one of the best romantic short stories I have read on Storiesonline.
Good character development in short story format is tough to pull off and Izzy does a very good job bringing his characters to life. They are very believable and easy to empathize with as the story develops.
The humor is the type that will bring a smile to your face and maybe a chuckle or two. I tend to enjoy stories with this type of humor as it does not overpower the story itself.
The descriptive sex in this story was some of the best I have read. It is not really stroke material though I did find it inspirational. The sex was a very key component in the emotional development of the story and characters. The sex is more emotional and romantic than erotic. Whether or not that is a good thing depends on what you as the reader are looking for. For myself, the sex fit the story and improved the whole.
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Review by Ivan_Ronical [other reviews by Ivan_Ronical]
Reviewed:
Izzy McMaster: wrote one story, did it well, called it quits.
"The Negative Seduction" is the tale of a cool MP who succeeds in a very entertaining method of attracting a detached, yet bodacious, Italian secretary. To say more would spoil what little mystery remains in this short story after reading its description and title, but I can say that even having predicted the full course of the story, as most readers will, it was still fun and enjoyable.
I find myself at a loss here because this is a much shorter story than I usually review, perhaps the shortest that I've ever reviewed? I'll fact check myself on this sometime if I get bored I guess. Character development and change, which is generally my favorite aspect of a story, is muted here: our main character is set in his ways and doesn't do anything outside his normal way of acting for the duration, but our female lead does reveal a bit more characterization along the way. It's well done altogether, even if we never get a completely firm grasp on who the characters are or what they would do in any given situation. The story is too short to provide that sort of info, and it is mercifully absent rather than bore the reader.
Izzy McMaster is a proficient writer, avoiding unnecessary descriptions, remembering I before E, and making only a very small number of trivial and nearly unnoticeable grammatical mistakes along the way. I shall emphasize my praise here, because it's seldom that I read a story which has ZERO random typos or misspellings. Or at least none that I noticed.
Sex exists in this story. I'd estimate that it takes up roughly 20% of the story's length, maybe less. It is not integral to the story's progression that the sex scene be included, but I appreciated its presence and it was tastefully done; no cumsluts magically appeared, no rampant manhoods plunged into bottomless depths, and nearly all other cliches were absent--a victory for both the author and reader.
Despite the relative brevity of this story compared to my usual reviewables, I laughed a number of times at the character-driven humor. I would say that the interactions between the two main characters in the middle of the story is certainly the high point, because the conversations and reactions are well thought-out and very plausible. It's no stretch of the imagination to picture this story having occurred somewhere.
I don't have anything more to add at this point. If you have 15-20 minutes and want a fun story with a good ending, try this out.
