Author's Description:
John Ostermier, 15 years old, accidentally killed another boy and had to flee for his life. He heads for California and rescues 3 women before he even gets out of Pennsylvania. He has a special rifle, a breech-loading flintlock, which his father invented. This rifle is capable of rapid fire and is extremely accurate. John "marries" the three women, ranging in age from 17 to 12. Join them as they head West toward a new life.
Size: 203 KB (39,490 words)
Genre: Western
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: mt/ft, Consensual, Romantic, Historical, Humor, Polygamy/Polyamory, First, Violent
John Ostermier, 15 years old, accidentally killed another boy and had to flee for his life. He heads for California and rescues 3 women before he even gets out of Pennsylvania. He has a special rifle, a breech-loading flintlock, which his father invented. This rifle is capable of rapid fire and is extremely accurate. John "marries" the three women, ranging in age from 17 to 12. Join them as they head West toward a new life.
Size: 203 KB (39,490 words)
Genre: Western
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: mt/ft, Consensual, Romantic, Historical, Humor, Polygamy/Polyamory, First, Violent
Review by Nulaak83 [other reviews by Nulaak83]
Reviewed:
The story has a novel plot compared to most Westerns I've read, but the story at times seems a bit circular and rushed. The story also alludes to a main pirate villain several times, but the protagonist and his allies never run into a major battle with him and simply roll over every pirate they meet.
There aren't a ton of spelling and grammar issues, but the ones that are there seem to be repeated throughout the story (passed used instead of past and loose used instead of lose). Overall the story is enjoyable, but could definitely use some editing to fix some spelling and grammar issues as well as making some minor plot adjustments.
Plot: 7 | Technical Quality: 7 | Appeal to Reviewer: 7
