I unexpectedly received a package. The name was slightly wrong and so was the address, but it was so close that the package had to be intended for me. I discovered a powerful substance in the package.
Size: 59 KB (11,409 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: mt/ft, mt/Fa, Mult, Mind Control, Mother, Son, Brother, Sister, First
Review by Mythic Shadow [other reviews by Mythic Shadow]
Reviewed:
The accidental package is a great mind control story.
The plot didn't have many twists, but that was okay since it was a short story.
On the technical side there were some errors, it distracted a bit but it wasn't too bad.
As far as my personal appeal goes; I enjoyed reading the story, but I would have liked it if the sex had more detail to it. Sometimes it was over in a flash, which is a pity for a story that claims to have much sex.
All the sex that Edward had left me wondering if he impregnated any of the girls, but just like the lack of mentioning protection, this never came up. There were also a lot of missed opportunities for girl on girl sex. With a couple of tweaks to the plot and more graphic details, this story could have easily scored a 10 for appeal.
If you want to read short, but fun mind control story, then I can recommend reading it, but if you want something more detailed then this might not be the story for you.
