Fat Farm by Lazlo Zalezac

Author's Description:
Denise is a fat woman. Her one and only friend introduces her to a unique weight loss program that helped her lose forty pounds. The only problem is the price she has to pay in order to participate in the program. Already filled with self-loathing, what is the loss of dignity in comparison to the loss of forty pounds?
Size: 835 KB ( ~ 158,341 words)
Genre: Drama
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Fa/Fa, Consensual, Reluctant, Coercion, Light Bond, Oral Sex, Anal Sex, Sex Toys, Cream Pie

Review by The Black Knight   [other reviews by The Black Knight]

Reviewed: 2008-07-08

This story is one that has sexual content, while still not being erotica. There will probably be some readers who find more of the elements in this story erotic, but it is hard to envision anyone who could consider all of it erotic. Personal preferences caused me to give it a somewhat lower appeal than it otherwise would have received.
That said, it is a masterful story. The characters were rich and diverse and largely fully developed. Not all of the characters were sympathetic, but that just makes them more realistic. Technically, a few errors were apparent, although they didn't detract from the story.
Those looking for stroke, those looking for romance, and those looking for light reading should definitely bypass this story. Anyone looking for a well-written character-driven psychological drama with some explicit bits, however, is gonna love this story so long as they can handle the content.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 7

Review by Andrew Johns   [other reviews by Andrew Johns]

Reviewed: 2008-07-07

In "Fat Farm", we have the story of an overweight woman that is encouraged by her best friend to join a weight loss program that the friend found to really work. The catch? She has to perform sexual acts on the man running the program as part of her fee. Can the main character handle things and lose the weight? Read along to find out.

The sex in the story starts off with a lot of unwelcomed humiliation for the main character, and approximately half of the story has her dreading each and every act. Due to this, the whole first half of the story had no erotic content for me. This also tempered the second half of the story, when the main character did start to enjoy it. I didn't care about her enjoying it by that point. That facet affects the overall stroke value for me.

The plot itself is interesting. The mental anguish the main character goes through comes across very clearly.

Technically, the story was fairly sound, but there were a few typos here and there. Leaving the "e" off of the word "tone" when talking about an overweight person's body is always good for a few chuckles.

Overall, I had a lot of trouble liking this story. I found the methods used by the man running the program offensive more often than not, and his ideology didn't feel right. I also was unable to bond with the main character. I felt sorry for her the way you end up feeling sorry for that friend you have that always whines, and you treat like the kid that cried "Wolf!" too many times. You want to avoid them, even when they start to make progress and have little triumphs to build on.

A lot of readers have enjoyed this work, based on the scores it has received. I was not one of them. The first half of the story was a very hard look into human misery for the main character, and that misery tainted the rest of the story for me. I just couldn't make the sudden switch the main character did, because I didn't like the main character by that point. That doesn't make this a bad story. It just happens to be one I didn't enjoy.

Plot: 7 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 5