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Author's Description:
College freshman Kyle Martin leaves his hometown of Paradise, Pa. to go to the Pennsylvania State University. He is seeking football glory, a degree in education and an education in life. He is parting with his long time high school sweet heart, Penny Edwards, who is attending the University of Pennsylvania two hundred miles away in Philadelphia. This story follows his successes, failures and excesses as he tries to find his place in the world.
Size: 7217 KB (1,345,288 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Ma/Ma, Consensual, Romantic, Group Sex, Anal Sex, School

Review by XofDallas   [other reviews by XofDallas]

Reviewed:


This is the latest in a series of stories by Doug Fox. The main character is Kyle Martin, who plays football for Penn State as a wide receiver.

The story is a very well-crafted one about a likable guy, who's reasonably gifted (6'4, 210, runs a 4.28 40 and has good leaping ability), but who has his share of faults, concerns and issues, who really works at improving his football knowledge and skills, and who does his best to a decent person.

If you're looking for sex, you'll find some, and it's well done - but the sex certainly isn't central to the plot or to the characters. Further, the story doesn't create improbable situations to keep the reader's interest. There are no lottery winners, nor are there any terrorist, government or corporate plots being used as crutches to create dramatic scenes or that wind up hijacking the original theme. And our hero (Kyle) is not always right, but also is not full of himself either, and the situations in which he finds himself are all very realistic and believable.

Stated simply, this is an entertaining read! It's fun watching as Kyle gains some maturity and learns to handle situations that come his way. It also provides a very good (and a very realistic, non-stereotyped) insight into the realities of big time college football programs, and what it takes for both individuals and teams to succeed at that level.

The characters generally are well-developed, they are not stereotypes, and there are also several subplots that weave into and out of the story. The subplots tend to enhance the story, rather than detract from it. As to the characters, while they may sometime seem a bit too good to be true, they're still plausible and believable. And, after all, this is a work of fiction.

There are a few typos that creep into the chapters on occasion, so it doesn't get a perfect "technical merit" score, but the lapses are small and don't interfere with the readability.

In summary, the story is so well put together that it is a delight to read it, and I find myself eagerly looking forward to reading each new chapter as it comes out (they're posted every other weekend). The main character, Kyle, is a guy most males can easily identify with, in spite of (or because of?) his minor faults. I have gotten to the point that I really want him to reach his goals (playing in the NFL, then teaching and coaching at the high school level), and will be disappointed if he doesn't. But of course, his future is for the author to decide. I merely look forward to finding out how Kyle turns out.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
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