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Author's Description:
Seventeen-year-old Jamie was angry from having to leave all that he loved behind. But what he was about to find would change his life forever.
Size: 168 KB (32,451 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, mt/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, Heterosexual, Humor, Tear Jerker, White Couple, Oral Sex, Masturbation, Petting, Cream Pie

Review by Andrew Johns   [other reviews by Andrew Johns]

Reviewed:


In "For the Love of Lynn", we have the story of a newly turned 18 yr old young man meeting his drop dead gorgeous next door neighbor when his family moves in, and the two of them being swept off their feet.

The stroke in this story is not really there much. I found myself wanting to skim past it, and as such was not aroused by it.

The plot itself was pretty plain. Young boy moves into a new house, disgusted with his constant moving. Beautiful older woman lives next door. They have an instant connection that they cannot resist. The characters are nothing if not predictable, and the same is true of the plot.

Technically, there were no glaring errors.

Overall, I was seriously underwhelmed by this story, to the point of being bored while reading it. Jamie and Lynn's instant connection makes for little to anticipate. There are no hurdles for the couple to really overcome, other than telling his parents. That conflict was resolved in a few paragraphs from start to finish.

There weren't any tearful moments. There wasn't much humor, either. The story is coded for both. The author over-coded the story, which isn't a bad thing, since you won't run into anything you didn't expect.

I'm hoping that we will see more substance, more relationship conflict, and more robust characters in any future work from this author. There was potential here, but instead it came across as a cookie-cutter type story. Very to the point, with almost no deviation from the expected. A good story has characters overcoming obstacles, and working through problems. This story needed that.

Overall, I don't recommend this story for stroke, but it may appeal to some readers that don't want to become involved in characters.

Plot: 5 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 6
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