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Author's Description:
Max, a 16 year-old boy, gets more than he bargained for when he agrees to help somebody in the changing room of a department store.
Size: 23 KB (4,377 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: mt/Fa, Teenagers, Consensual, Heterosexual, Humor, First, Oral Sex
Max, a 16 year-old boy, gets more than he bargained for when he agrees to help somebody in the changing room of a department store.
Size: 23 KB (4,377 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: mt/Fa, Teenagers, Consensual, Heterosexual, Humor, First, Oral Sex
Review by jbentham [other reviews by jbentham]
Reviewed:
I liked this story both for the technical quality of the writing and because it made me believe I could be the kid.
The main character, a teen guy, acts just like I would have and all is descibed with a nice touch, like you are seeing it. He gets himself in an improbable situation, not impossible, and the erotic situation careens off out of his control, but not unpleasantly. We'd all like to have been in his shoes.
Near the end it takes a twist, humorous and yet promising action in the future in a completely different direction leaving me wanting more. I'll be reading this one again.
Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
