Mark and Jenny were always close until a boyfriend came between them. They get their second chance, when that boyfriend drives Jenny to attempt suicide.
Size: 488 KB (96,586 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: mt/ft, Teenagers, Consensual, Romantic, Heterosexual, Pregnancy
Review by tendertouch [other reviews by tendertouch]
Reviewed:
This story starts off rather nicely — Mark saves the life of his best friend — Jenny — and they finally get together. I really wanted to enjoy the story and for the first half it looked like I would. From there the plot devolves into a series of amazingly unlikely events the likes of which would suggest that someone should have been buying lottery tickets. There's only so much "suspension of disbelief" that a reader can be expected to muster, though, for a story set in a non-fantasy universe and this story overloads that in a pretty big hurry after Mark's father gets home from a business trip.
The technical quality of the writing along with an attachment to the two main characters was enough to override some of the plot's problems for a while — in fact the story had a bit of a Forrest Gump feeling. At least it did until we find that Jenny is a weak character and Mark has an apparent vindictive side. After that there's no real saving grace.
The story could have been made much better by either making the plot more believable or by embracing the sterling qualities of the main characters instead of having them play the old jealousy game.
In the end this story can be seen as a reminder, at least by me, to wait until a story is finished before voting on it.
