A young man receives a strange inheritance
Size: 144 KB (27,793 words)
Incomplete and Inactive
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: mt/ft, mt/Fa, Fa/Fa, Fa/ft, Mind Control, Incest, Mother, Sister, Grand Parent, Aunt, Nephew, BDSM, DomSub, MaleDom, FemaleDom, Spanking, Light Bond, Harem, First, Anal Sex, Sex Toys, Cream Pie
Review by Andrew Johns [other reviews by Andrew Johns]
Reviewed:
In "The Will", a young man inherits both a small fortune, and the sexual access to his female relatives.
This story is marked as a complete one at 5 chapters. However, it doesn't come to any natural conclusion, so either the author failed to mark it as a serial, or it was just poorly ended. The basic premise is fine, but the application of it is shaky. There is little sense of flow to the work, as everything happens in the space of 3 days. Or was it 2? I have no desire to go back and check.
The quality of the writing is poor. The author fluctuates between the US and British spellings of various words a few times in the same paragraph. The lack of good punctuation made it difficult to read. Capitalization was also spotty in places. The jarring abuse of the rules of the English language made this a chore to read.
Some of the sex scenes in the story were not bad, but it was poorly coded. It is coded for light bondage, but the bondage is actually moderately extreme. From fairly harsh nipple torture, to the use of stocks and suspension, to raping a "mind controlled but having some free will" subject both anally and vaginally is pretty rough stuff. Also, the author failed to categorize the FF code, creampie code, first code, amongst others. There is stroke value in this, though, if you enjoy the types of sex acts being done. If you get get past the writing, I can definitely see readers getting hot by it.
The heavy handed use of an editor, as well as a continuation of the story, might make this something I would read again in the future. As it currently is, this work has only some small value as poorly written stroke.
I do not recommend this story.
