The girls in my office were talking about memorable sex at lunch. This is the story I DIDN'T tell them!
Size: 25 KB (5,292 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/ft, Teenagers, Consensual, Heterosexual, Light Bond, First
Review by Andrew Johns [other reviews by Andrew Johns]
Reviewed:
In "Sisters Share", Paige Turner writes about a woman that tells us about an event in her past. A day when her older sister tied up her boyfriend, and then mind-fucked him with fantasies about her little sister.
This was a brilliant "mind-fuck" story. The older sister masterfully manipulates her boyfriend through one of his favorite fantasies, without his knowing that much of it is actually happening. She plays up to his desires and kinks about her little sister, with said little sister there to act most of them out.
The sex is very hot, especially if mind-fucks are one of your things. (They are mine!) The way the older sister goes about her domination of her boyfriend, and the way she taunts him with different things, is just perfectly done.
The plot is well handled. Things move in a crisp but detailed manner. Being pure stroke, the characters aren't fleshed out in detail, but that's OK for this kind of writing. It was tightly put together, making the stroke value that much higher.
Technically, there were a few errors, but nothing that really jarred me out of the scenes. I had to go back and re-read it with a tighter eye to even notice them.
All in all, a very pleasant surprise, and I will have to see more of what Paige Turner has written.
Review by Pleasure Boy 1 [other reviews by Pleasure Boy 1]
Reviewed:
A very hot story. Intensely erotic with a loss-of-innocence tinge to it, just the way I like 'em. The girls are both believable and the situation flows realistically, even though it's complete fantasy.
The plot could have been helped with more characterization, as always. Have the sisters get into a major fight in an establishing scene, build up a lot of tension, and then resolve it with the sex scene. Always try to make distinct characters, with unique quirks and mannerisms. This makes the story world real and the sex even more mind-blowing.
The only trouble is, there are typos and grammar errors all over the place (e.g. you need an apostrophe when you're talking about a "boys cock" -> "boy's cock". The apostrophe denotes a possessive noun.) I think these errors are the only thing holding this story back from being at least a 9.4 or higher. Also, the author keeps slipping from present tense to past tense narrative and it's pretty distracting. Readers want to lose themselves in the action and errors like these are like speedbumps.
Other than that, excellent work! I plan to read more of this author's work in the future, just for the mind-fuck factor.
