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This book takes up just a little later than where the last one left off. The gods have returned, and it is due to Demons having gained control of a gate to Paul's magical world. Join Paul and his friends as they battle for the very life of their world!
Size: 365 KB (71,095 words)
Genre: Fiction
Sex Contents: No Sex
Tags: Fiction

Review by The Old Fart   [other reviews by The Old Fart]

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I don't mean to imply that Book II is a bad story. It's not and I voted it a 10 after I was done with it. However, like many sequels, it doesn't match the original. How can a follow-up story be new and different? The first thing I noticed was that I was able to put it down. I still wanted to read it but it wasn't as compelling as the first book. (Book I is one of those stories you wish you could vote 10+ on.)

Paul is a married man in this story, Mirwanna officially becomes Queen and the Gods and Goddesses are back in their temple. New worlds and new characters are introduced. We get to meet the demon once known as Satan, a race called the Ancients and even the Creator of All in a cameo appearance. There are all kinds of characters who want to make Paul powerful and he becomes almost as strong as a demi-god by the time it's all said and done.

The editing is better in this story but there was one chapter that had many mistakes. It was like a dent on a new car; it stuck out in comparison to the rest. I assume Volentrin got emails pointing them out when it went up originally (I sure do) so I was disappointed a corrected chapter hadn't replaced it.

The story is good and is well worth your time. You'll be missing out if you don't read it. Without the first book to compare it to, it's as good as most of them out there. And don't expect any sex scenes. There's sex in the story, but it's behind closed doors.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9
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