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Author's Description:
His special talent had rescued him from yet another unpleasant situation. But, had it really?
Size: 11 KB (2,111 words)
Genre: Incest
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, Time Travel, Incest

Review by pj   [other reviews by pj]

Reviewed:


A 'one-hit' wonder story discovered on the random story selector.

This effort illustrates the dichotomy between the single score and TPA. There are many more single scoring votes resulting in a 5.82 relative score. Yet the TPA is solid eights.
This is a very short story and I wont put spoilers here, but I will give a hint. It's sort of Mind Control and definitely Time Travel.. but with a twist; enough of a twist, in my opinion, that the plot deserves at least a nine if not ten.

As to the Technical the only clunker for me was the use of 'DIA' to refer to Denver airport. Which is DEN. The author obviously meant Denver International Airport but I distracted out to find what airport used DIA as a code.

But the story itself made up for it for anyone with an imagination. Who knew there could be a time travel Mobius Loop!

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9
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