Reviewed:
I just sort of stumbled across this little story, and I'm glad I did. Although it's written in an almost 'stream of conciousness' fashion, I found it pretty erotic, and it certainly pushed a few of my buttons.
It's pretty good technically too, with no glaring errors to divert the reader's imagination, it rollicks along right up to the delightful twist in the tail. The language too, portrays the age of the main protagonist, as she stumbles into adulthood.
For me, this was the epitome of the short story genre, and I thought it was worth far more than the measly 7.71 it actually scored. I definitely recommend it!
Read, and enjoy!