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A father and his beautiful daughter crash land high in the mountains. They survive with love.
Size: 44 KB (8,696 words)
Genre: Incest
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Ma/ft, mt/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, NonConsensual, Reluctant, Coercion, Incest, Father, Daughter, BDSM, DomSub, MaleDom, Spanking, Light Bond, Safe Sex, Oral Sex, Anal Sex, Masturbation, Petting, Sex Toys, Lactation, Pregnancy

Review by fuzzywuzzy   [other reviews by fuzzywuzzy]

Reviewed:


Sometimes even the most prolific Authors have mild bouts of irregular spell checkers, and you, dear reader, have to mentally correct the bad English, and a bad Spell Checker!

But please persist, it will be worth it.

Our Hero is a loving lustful Daddy, who takes his beautiful Daughter on a flight across some of the most desolate ground in the World. The Roof of the World From Katmandu to Tibet. But there are slight problems. One, he took his sexy daughter with him . And two, the Chinese are after him and shoot down the DC4 over really inhospitable mountains.

In the meantime his partner discovers that the wife starts an affair with her son in law. And daughter ends up pregnant, well, you get my message ... Enjoy!

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 5 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9

Review by jbentham   [other reviews by jbentham]

Reviewed:


This story is a fairly typical father and daughter get stranded and wind up falling in love. The twist is that the daughter's husband and her mom are fucking behind dad's and daughter's back. It has the potential to be a nice addition to the genre.

The story isn't really grounded in reality. There are little things like MIGs using cannons when they would have used missles and big things like the daughter showing all the signs of wanting dad but suddenly saying no, then yes all inside of 10 seconds. Yeah, this is fantasy but fantasy works because the story touches reality enough for us to believe the fantasy sections. The characters, the action, the dialouge don't help the reader believe in this story.

Another problem, especially for me, is that it currently is a mess of grammer errors. For instance, basterd instead of bastard, peek instead of peak, sense instead of since. Those were just a few of the spelling errors in nearly every section. The punctuation was so poor it interferred with my reading.

In all, this reads like a first draft rather than a completed story. An editor would do wonders and one can only hope the author will find a first class editor to help him turn this into a finished story.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 4 | Appeal to Reviewer: 5
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