Eric and Sheila are at the lake making out enjoying themselves. The problem is they are at the wrong place at the wrong time. This story has no redeeming social qualities. Just a fun sexy read that I am enjoying writing. Hope you enjoy it as well.
Size: 123 KB (24,278 words)
In Progress
Genre: Science Fiction
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Fa/Fa, Fiction, Science Fiction, Aliens
Review by dookie [other reviews by dookie]
Reviewed:
I have just read the first three chapters of Alien Encounter. The concept is intriguing and will attract science fiction readers. Unfortunately, the delivery is so poor I have decided not to continue reading.
I haven’t read other stories by Stacatto, whose story ratings and readership are fair-to-middling. I’m happy that Stacatto has a following, but I will not join them.
The biggest problem is technical. The dialogue is stilted and doesn’t read as natural conversation. Much of this is due to a lack of contractions; native English speakers don’t speak like Stacatto’s characters. On top of that, there are far too many typos and incorrect words in the text. At one point, the author switched from third-person narrative to first. The most egregious error was that a secondary character was introduced and her identity changed back and forth between two first names. I couldn’t enjoy the story because of the error-filled text.
I’m sorry, Stacatto, I would have liked to continue. I suggest you find a good editor and resubmit this story.
