They make her their slut.
Size: 39 KB (7,665 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, mt/ft, Ma/ft, Mult, Reluctant
Review by Celeste [other reviews by Celeste]
Reviewed:
I may have said it before, but I'll say it again. Phil Phantom has not been the same since the loss of sidekick Tiffany, which was quite a while ago. The last couple PP stories I've dug into have slid rapidly into the mold of cliche-style hillbilly family sex romps. I sometimes like a good hillybilly family sex romp, but I _don't_ like largely recycled (or recyclable) material.
Basic synopsis: Neighbor girl is made into sex slave for a slobbering family of big-dicked guys. Some of the parents conspire in this. The End.
In fact, the ending is a letdown because although we've gotten a little action with the neighbor girl, the big enchilada is left off the menu, so to speak. We never get culmination of the acts described. I'll give the story much credit for being original in this sense. Sometimes talking about doing something is more fun to read than the doing. With fantasies that "feel dangerous" this often works. Or in a case where all the buildup and tension leading up to an act are written really interestingly and I can feel like I "might as well" have experienced it without having to have been explicit. Not so here. I felt cheated.
Now, as to the characterization- here's a thought: uneducated ill-mannered characters aren't very sexy. I'm not saying we can't have some good raunch, but the flock of men and the mother hens described in this story are daytime talkshow poster children. Worst of all, perhaps, is that the neighbor girl herself- who should be more of a centerpiece- doesn't have a lot to say for herself. She's a so thoroughly "coached" actor (both in the plot and in a literary sense) it seems fake. Acted, in fact.
The phone conversation between the two mothers in the story is surreal. How anyone could imagine that those two would respond to each other in the ways that were chosen is beyond me. It's not just family-sex-romp logic going on here-- it's just incongruous how they talk to each other.
Maybe I'm picking on Phil a bit too hard. In the pile of recent incest stories this actually rates average- not poor. It's rather unfortunate that we are currently experiencing another downturn in production of *literate* incest stories. This has happened before, and it's been reversed before too.
