A young man invents a machine that when women are exposed to it will turn into sex machines.
Size: 218 KB (40,396 words)
Genre: Incest
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: mt/ft, mt/Fa, ft/ft, Consensual, NonConsensual, Mind Control, Incest, Mother, Son, Brother, Sister, MaleDom, Oral Sex
Review by Andrew Johns [other reviews by Andrew Johns]
Reviewed:
In "The Invention", we have the story of a H.S. boy that creates a device that causes girls/women to have an overwhelming desire to have sex. Read along and discover who he uses it on, and what other effects the device has!
The sex in the story is hot, with the women being nearly crazed with lust, and going for it with great enthusiasm. This is definitely a stroke story.
The plot itself is fairly simple, with just enough going on to move from one sexual encounter to the next.
Technically, this story was not very well written. There were many "wrong homonym used" and typos throughout the story. The author also seemed to waffle on where the hymen was, as he would say in one sentence "her cunt gripped me tightly" and in the next sentence "her hymen strained to keep me out".
Overall, this is a tough one to evaluate, as 'Dark Paladin' picked up an unfinished story and completed it. We can't determine how much was missed in his finishing it, and how much he actually edited and cleaned it up.
As a stroke piece, this does quite nicely. And the plot is a good idea that only gets used enough to move from girl to girl. The technical problems are often a distraction, so the final appeal was reduced for me.
If you are looking for a good stroke with MC, this is definitely a story to pick, as it keeps things simple to get to the sex. If you are looking for better writing and/or a more fulfilling plot, this may not work for you.
Review by Mark [other reviews by Mark]
Reviewed:
I first read "The Invention" several years ago, when it was first posted. I read many, many SOL tales — meaning that I can't remember them all and usually forget that I've already read a story and start it again.
"The Invention" is part of a smallish group of stories that I remember well, and remember the title and author. This is indeed a rare phenomenon for me.
Dark Paladin partnered with Anonymous to craft the tale of a young genius working on a science fair project. His experiments with his small pets wherein he is attempting to pickup their brain waves lead to an invention that can influence their behaviour. Specifically, he can cause the females to go into heat so strongly as to wear out the males.
His experiments expand to his sister, mother, and eventually several girls that seem to seriously enjoy his attentions.
He wrestles with moral issues a bit, but he is, after all, a teenage human male... he tends to think more with his "little head."
All in all a very enjoyable story. Well crafted, well presented and memorable. Read it for either general fun or as a stroker. Works Ok for both.
Review by Cowboy [other reviews by Cowboy]
Reviewed:
I really like this story. I was hoping the author would write a sequal, and he has started to write one, and so far it is really great. Everyone should read this story, then wait like me for the rest of the sequal.
