How I pissed of the guy down the Hall
Size: 119 KB (22,473 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/ft, Fa/ft, Mult, Consensual, BDSM, Anal Sex
Review by Andrew Johns [other reviews by Andrew Johns]
Reviewed:
In "Alan's Sister", we have the story of a 15yr old girl that shows up at her brother Alan's dorm, and starts to have sex with many of his friends. We see all this through the eyes of Sam, the first guy she seduces. How long can Sam keep Alan from finding out he and several others are screwing Alan's sister? Read along and find out.
Stroke wise, this story is pretty close to non-stop sex. Much of it is quite hot, and the story would make for a good stroke piece, if not for the poor technical quality.
The plot itself is pretty decent. Since it is written as stroke, the plot satisfies the purpose of moving from one scene to the next.
Technically, this story is not very good. While the spelling is not too bad, it is very common for 2 people to speak in the same sentence, making conversations difficult to follow. This really hurt the story quite a bit.
I remember when this story was first published, and found it while surfing through older stories. I remembered it as good stroke, and had forgotten how poorly it was written.
If you can handle poor technical writing, and are looking for pure stroke, this will do quite well for you. I personally need a better techincal score than I can honestly give this one.
Read at your own risk!
