Husband discovers that wife had a lover during their twenty-five-year marriage. The resulting complications require the husband to make some unusual choices.
Size: 107 KB (21,011 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Mult, Consensual, Romantic, BiSexual, Heterosexual, Fiction, Cheating, Group Sex, Oral Sex, Exhibitionism, Slow, Military, War
Review by richardshagrin [other reviews by richardshagrin]
Reviewed:
A good, no, very good story with a much lower than deserved score. I suspect the one-bombers are protesting the unfaithful wife theme. I probably shouldn't mention details, I don't want to spoil the story for anyone. It is well worth reading and has a lot more variety than most with the guaranteed low score tags.
I liked the hero's occupations and the ending. There is a little sex, but it isn't a stroke story, at least not in my opinion. And I learned a new word, exustion. I though it was exhaustion but no, the author is smarter than I am. That may not be difficult.
Doing the numbers, the plot is a nine, an A plus. I don't give many tens, and the story is still a short story. While there is a lot of variation in viewpoints and locations, I didn't get lost even once, so the plot isn't complex enough for a ten. The technical is also a nine. I did find what I think was a mis-spelled word. Nobody is perfect, and Nobody doesn't write stories for me to review.
Appeal to reviewer breaks the nine chain. I gave it an eight, which is an A, very good. There are some issues with suspension of disbelief, after I finished the story. I know nothing about aircraft carrier operations or how the government might award or take away contracts to work on new engines, but some of it seemed tailored to make the story work rather than follow "real life".
That's a weak criticism, because most of the fiction I enjoy starts with assumptions that aren't very realistic. But those items I need a 50 ton crane to suspend disbelief for appear early in the story. I didn't find the Admiral and the psychiatrist and security agent in uniforms convincing. Don't get me wrong, its is well worth reading the story but the author may be a little too firmly in control to move it along where he wants it to go to be entirely convincing. Your mileage may vary.
To summarize: read the story. It's very good and one-bombers should be ashamed of themselves.
