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Author's Description:
When a low-level assignment goes off the rails, Hunter Lightfoot struggles to protect an opinionated, headstrong, fifteen-year-old girl while unraveling a conspiracy that leads all the way to the White House.
Size: 286 KB (52,331 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/ft, Consensual, Romantic, Fiction, First, Oral Sex, Anal Sex, Slow

Review by manddscott   [other reviews by manddscott]

Reviewed:


The US general tasked with overseeing the UN forces in Europe is murdered, his death pinned on the person guarding the general's daughter. Hunter Lightfoot, the daughter's guard, in what is supposed to be a temporary assignment, finds himself fleeing from the real killers, with Callie, the general's daughter, in tow. This is a romance in the best sense of the word.

For plot, I give the story an A+ (9). The author does an excellent job of filling in the pieces of the story. If anything, I found myself scanning through the sex scenes further in the story to get to the meat and potatoes of the story.

For technical score, another A+ (9). I only spotted a few errors, mainly in homophones (lightening/lightning, passed/past, etc).

For personal appeal, another A+ (9). The author does a great job of building the relationship in a way that makes it believable. The interaction between the two main characters is also touching, sometimes making the reader laugh, other times pulling at heartstrings. The puzzles throughout the story will make the reader use their noggin for more than just reading. He ends the story with a good wrapup, leaving some things unexplained, but giving a final puzzle as the reason why.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9
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