Hawaii is the vacation destination for a widower and his young daughter. They thought they were there to see whales and do some sightseeing. That all changed when Rachel crossed their path.
Size: 275 KB (50,483 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: No Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Romantic, Heterosexual, Fiction, White Male, Hispanic Female
Review by Bud Ugly [other reviews by Bud Ugly]
Reviewed:
If you like romance stories, you should read this one. It's a story about a supermodel who seems to be nearing burn-out and an army vet who has a little girl and who's lost his wife to cancer.
The plot is believable, the characters engaging, and it's easy to get immersed in the story. I found no major plot holes. Characters are generally well-drawn; they're not one-dimensional, and the main characters (model, vet, and daughter) are well-done.
There are no guns, no secret agents, and in fact no sex in the story, so if those are your requirements, look elsewhere. It's pure and simply a love story, and a good one.
Technically it's very good, but not perfect. I did find some places where I disagreed with the punctuation, and where compound words should have been used, but these are not fatal flaws.
All in all I was quite impressed. The story drew me in, the quality is good, and I found it very appealing. I hope that ShadowWriter writes more of this type of story.
Review by manddscott [other reviews by manddscott]
Reviewed: - (Review Updated: )
I was reading a much longer story when I came to a stopping point and chose to see what was new on SOL. This little gem caught my eye, and here I am offering a review after just finishing it up.
They say that those who have loved deeply have the capacity to love again. This story is one of loss and recovery, where the MC has lost his wife to cancer. On a vacation to Hawaii with his daughter, luck has him sharing a whale watching tour with a beautiful supermodel and some of her friends. Following a dinner, he manages to save their lives, at great injury to himself. The rest is, as some say, history (or fiction, in this case).
I give the plot an A (8). The only thing I would have liked to have seen added was a little more detail of what happened just before the last chapter. It seems a couple of years got skipped with little explanation. What other common ground did they find? What obstacles, other than his rehab for the injury, did they face and overcome?
For technical quality, I also give it an A (8). Although the story was well-written, there were a number of both spelling and grammatical errors, both in English and Spanish, to bring the score down a little. A missing word here or an added word there did not help. The mistakes however, were slight and did not distract much from the story itself.
For appeal,at least to me, I give it an A+ (9). I don't recall any sex scenes, but to me those would have interfered with the plot in this story. This was an enjoyable read.
Edit - The author has gone back and made the necessary changes to the grammatical errors in both languages to merit a revised score for technical quality. As such, I am raising the score from an A (8) to an Exceptional (10). I did verify that the ellipsis (...) used throughout the story were there to denote a longer pause than normal in conversation. The plot and personal appeal scores remain the same.
