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Author's Description:
What if you realize that you are making a huge mistake? What if you find out that your bride-to-be is in league with your abusive birth family who has shunned you and robbed you? What if you realize you'd rather be with your new Rainbow Family? Then you must Speak Now. George did.
Size: 106 KB (19,767 words)
Genre: Drama
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, First

Review by manddscott   [other reviews by manddscott]

Reviewed:


An enjoyable read for the most part. If you are looking for huge amounts of sex, this is not the story for you. I found the plot to be decent, but felt it lacking in some details. The basis and premise of the story could easily be expanded into a much longer story.

I felt that the story fell apart at the end, almost as if the author was rushing to complete the work rather than telling the story with the same flow seen earlier in the work. Other than that, I found it very likable. I would have liked for the MC to have found more definitive proof of the gold-digger's deceptions, even if after the breakup, simply to justify his treatment of the witch. That, however, is my personal preference only. There were a few grammatical errors, but nothing so major that it stopped me from continuing to read.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 7 | Appeal to Reviewer: 7
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