A sixteen-year-old beauty and her mother ask an older neighbor to teach the teen the was of love, not just sex.
Size: 264 KB (49,962 words)
Genre: Fiction
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Ma/ft, Consensual, Heterosexual, Fiction, White Couple, First, Oral Sex, Anal Sex, Big Breasts
Review by richardshagrin [other reviews by richardshagrin]
Reviewed:
This is a good story. Its one of my favorite themes, stacked. Mom and daughter with the same guy. Turns out to be new girls or women in each of the chapters. High stroke value. I made some continuity suggestions after I read it, but even without any of my interference it still works very well. I don't want anyone to not read it because I might have a few suggestions.
Well, ok, one item. In the last chapter it turns out he has a motorcycle in his garage he hasn't used for a long time, and takes the new woman for a ride. Lots of good stories include motorcycle riding. But this cycle just appeared from the point of view of the story from nowhere (I know, the garage).
Our hero is in his fifties. He has had several girls and a few fewer moms, and at no point was there an indication our hero had been a motorcycle rider or had friends that did, nor did he take anyone else riding.
There were issues like that where each individual chapter was very good and worked well and even had satisfactory endings. And then the next chapter he had new girls or women and it was like the story started over again.
Damn, I didn't want to be even a little negative about this gem. Its well worth reading. But I think I can tell a lot of this author's other stories are shorter than this one. I recommended an editor. I only found two proofreading type errors, where spell check let the author down, by spelling the wrong word correctly. One was buy for by. The other was in the story description, I'll bet he is going to fix that one.
So read it and tell the author what you think. I think both you and he will be pleased by what you decide to say.
Oh yes, the numbers. Again my rating is based on 6 for a C, 7 for a B, and 8 for an A. 9 is A plus, and I give one ten a month, at most. The highest rated story I have found out of well over 37,000 on SOL is 9.7. It should be really hard to get a ten. All 8s is a very good, A grade story.
