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Author's Description:
After a visit from someone he believes he can trust, Tim Murphy's life changes in ways he never could have imagined.
Size: 3293 KB (620,495 words)
In Progress
Genre: Fiction
Sex Contents: Minimal Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, mt/ft, mt/Fa, Consensual, Heterosexual, Celebrity, Sports, Science Fiction, Time Travel, DoOver, First, Safe Sex, Oral Sex, Slow, School, Military

Review by Jetcrash747   [other reviews by Jetcrash747]

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I have been following this story since Shinerdrinker first started submitting it on 3/26/2015.

Starting out in the future then jumping back to the present I got very confused until I paid closer attention to the story. The story makes sense now. So don't quit reading it in frustration, Shrinerdrinker is slowly tying everything together with two stories of the same basic guy. With the future and present and future and present evolving into the present/future, kinda confusing to say the least.

But this is an excellent story and I strongly recommend that you give it a chance. Be patient the author publishes at his own pace, it just getting better and better.

10/14/2018

It has been a long time since posting this review, so thought it needed an update.

When 'Shinerdrinker',a brand new author posting his very first story on SOL, I reviewed his first chapter in hopes of encouragement to finish the story. He is still writing and the the story keeps getting better. Today I just reread chapter 37 about a hurricane, a week of school missed and a little phone sex in the younger Tim's section. The time traveling Tim has also lost all his weight and fought some bad guys. I can not say too much about the story, just give little hints about the plot and characters. Mayhem in a Pill is a fantastic tale even if we are waiting on the evolution of the plots to appear online.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
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