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Maturity in a redo story.

wholf359 🚫

I have loved redo stories since "A Fresh Start" was being posted during the week new. One thing that has struck me however is how different author's have vastly different levels of maturity and in some cases memory's of the past life. Ranging from completely adult in a teenager body to a teenager with vague memory's of being an adult. I'm curious to hear from author's who have written these stories why you chose the level of maturity and memory retention you did, and would you change it now?

The Outsider 🚫
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@wholf359

No, I would not change it. (TECHNICALLY "A Charmed Life" is NOT a re-do story, but I get your point...)

Number 1, my muse has run away screaming, so my drive to write is just about gone these days.

Number 2, back in the early 80s, when I was in high school (yeah, I know I'm old), relationships like the ones depicted (especially the sexual ones) were frequently seen. (People losing their virginity (male and female) while they were teenagers.)

Don't even get me started on how the FB Reel videos bleep out swear words, kill, hell, etc, these days...

And, for the person who suggested my main character in Knox #3 (Sabrina) would be better as an LBGTQ+ character, that didn't even EXIST when I started writing, or even when that part of the story takes place... Not happening...

And (Grammar Nazi in the room...), "memories" is the correct spelling, not "memory's." And, "author's" is possessive, not plural... "AUTHORS"

(Yeah, at my age, I've already got the "angry old man" thing down pat...)

Michael Loucks 🚫
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@The Outsider

(People losing their virginity (male and female) while they were teenagers.)
...
And, for the person who suggested my main character in Knox #3 (Sabrina) would be better as an LBGTQ+ character, that didn't even EXIST when I started writing, or even when that part of the story takes place... Not happening...

I've had similar comments for my stories which start in the mid-70s or very early 80s. People don't get it. I've had people tell me, expressly, that there was no way teens were having that much sex. All I can say is, they sure were in my HS in the late 70s and very early 80s.

And people were NOT freaking out about it, either. It was considered normal, even if discouraged by fathers with shotguns.

The Outsider 🚫
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@Michael Loucks

Don't forget the people who didn't care about others riding WITHOUT SEATBELTS in the back of pickups or station wagons. Then, there's Star Wars on 8-track...

Replies:   Michael Loucks
Michael Loucks 🚫

@The Outsider

Then, there's Star Wars on 8-track...

My dad had an 8-track player in our Winnebago Chieftan (the 27' one). Listened to dozens of tapes ranging from Johnny Cash to Herb Alpert to the Carpenters while we traveled the entire western US plus western Canada and northern Mexico during the summer of '72.

Still a fan of Cash and Herb Alpert to this day.

Oh, and we never wore seatbelts in the motor home. :-)

Replies:   PotomacBob
PotomacBob 🚫

@Michael Loucks

I was in high school in the 1950s. The risk of getting pregnant was high. Kids still managed to have sex, especially in the back seats of cars, which at that time were all bench seats. That all changed on May 11, 1960, when the FDA approved the use of "the pill" and birth control without using a condom became practical. The AIDS scare was still a couple of decades in the future.

Michael Loucks 🚫

@PotomacBob

Yep. I was most of the way through college before AIDS was enough of a concern, and married in '86.

The Outsider 🚫
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@PotomacBob

I joined the EMS about the time when they started using actual gloves on calls. The latex ones were nice to shoot across a trauma room to a biohazard trash bin. White talc doesn't mix with black uniform pants...

"Ryan White" was a real thing we learned the important way...

sunseeker 🚫
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@Michael Loucks

100% agree! I was in my teens in the mid 70's-early 80's and EVERYONE was boinking EVERYONE! Everywhere and anywhere! In cars, trucks n vans, at parties often even if others were nearby. It was definitely NORMAL!

SunSeeker

Replies:   jimq2
jimq2 🚫

@sunseeker

Hell, That was even true in the early to mid 60's. Hormones were running wild.

Michael Loucks 🚫

@Michael Loucks

Don't tell them about cigarette machines with no age checks and a pack cost 50Β’ or less (and far less if you bought them at the gas station).

Or riding bikes without helmets. Or going out at 9:00am as a pre-teen and being told to come home in time for dinner.

Their heads will explode.

Replies:   Charro6  Joe Long  tendertouch
Charro6 🚫

@Michael Loucks

During my preteen years in the late 70's. I remember walking a few blocks to the corner convenience store. I would purchase a loaf of bread or milk and a pack of Kool cigarettes for my father without even being questioned by the clerk.

Joe Long 🚫

@Michael Loucks

and the coin operated condom dispensers in the men's room of the bowling alley, gas stations and convenience stores. I wrote about that, too.

tendertouch 🚫

@Michael Loucks

Or riding bikes without helmets.

Oh, I remember riding bikes without a helmet. I even remember the last time I did it in 1978 β€” not so much the ride as waking up with a concussion. I don't recommend that experience to anyone.

I've crashed harder several times since, but never had my bell rung.

Replies:   The Outsider
The Outsider 🚫
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@tendertouch

I tired break-checking my sister as we rode our bikes (I was trying to be funny - even back then, what I *thought* was funny, really wasn't…) and she slammed into my left pedal, causing both of us to crash, when I thought she'd go sailing by me…

No injuries for either of us, thankfully…

Joe Long 🚫

@Michael Loucks

As we've discussed, my story in set in the same period, from summer 1979 to spring 1980. I deliberately chose to make the amount of sex realistic, but at the same time, lots of teenagers were doing it back then, and I also make a point to show (like "Perks of a Being a Wallflower" did) that 16-21 was our main social group, and any outliers were usually on the low end, with the occasional girl from 11 or 12 up to 15 at parties, getting drunk, and sometimes getting laid or giving BJs. I've seen young teen girls at house parties for mixed college/adult, and wrote it in.

DBActive 🚫

@Michael Loucks

Young people were having more sex in the 70s and early 80s than now. Much of that came to a halt in the early 80s when HIV/AIDS came onto the scene. People today have a hard time understanding the (justifiable) fear that caused at the time, not only in the gay community.
An example, my wife worked in NYC at the time. The business she worked had a high proportion of gay men but also a lot of young heterosexual people of both sexes. For a few years it seemed that there was a funeral every month - gays were the majority, but a large proportion of straight men and women.

Replies:   Michael Loucks
Michael Loucks 🚫

@DBActive

Young people were having more sex in the 70s and early 80s than now. Much of that came to a halt in the early 80s when HIV/AIDS came onto the scene.

That absolutely had an effect, an a big one, but equally big (and more so in the long run) was the moral panic over 'stranger danger' and the attendant helicopter parenting and the idea that it was unsafe to be ANYWHERE or do ANYTHING until you were an adult (i.e. 18). Lies were told about kidnapping and abuse statistics (and later recidivism statistics) to scare the public.

All one need do is look at the general reaction to a sixteen-year-old guy willingly and happily having sex with a female teacher.

β€’ 60s/70s/early 80s β€” "Great job, kid!"
β€’ 90s and onward β€” "My son's childhood was stolen by a predator! (and make her wear virtual a Scarlet A)"

I'm not talking about right or wrong, but about the typical response. Both of the above responses are wrong, but the second one is wronger (to coin a term).

TheDarkKnight 🚫

@The Outsider

back in the early 80s, when I was in high school (yeah, I know I'm old),

You are not old, sir, maybe middle-aged. I graduated from high school in 1962.

Replies:   The Outsider
The Outsider 🚫
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@TheDarkKnight

I still shouldn't snap, crackle, and pop the way I do now, though... 1987 for me...

tendertouch 🚫
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@wholf359

I chose to portray Jeff as an adult in a kids body because that's what I was interested in β€” using his maturity and knowledge to avoid a mistake. There's more to it than that, but you'll need to read the story to understand since I don't want to give away a plot twist.

I also played the character straight up β€” no augmented memories or abilities, just what an adult with certain proclivities (desire for love/companionship, minimal interest in money, etc...) would have at their fingertips.

No, I wouldn't change that part now if I rewrote it.

wholf359 🚫

@wholf359

Several things in no particular order. I was born in 1985 and spent childhood on a bike in my town and was simply told to be home at dark. In high school teen pregnancy was so common that when they started construction on the new school the summer after I graduated, they included a daycare for students babies. The last is to simply say I have a Traumatic Brain Injury and proper grammar is sometimes very difficult.

Replies:   Joe Long
Joe Long 🚫

@wholf359

There did appear to be a rise of teen pregnancies, although back in the day the girls were doing it, but were picking enough to only be doing it with guys they considered marrying, and when they did become pregnant, they married the guy. Like my mom and my mother-in-law did. I graduated HS in '77 and only remember two girls getting pregnant and both were considered before then to be very loose. There were more who got married while still in school. One guy went to Vietnam and brought home a 15 year old bride who enrolled in 10th grade at my HS (a couple years before me)

Today, the girls get pregnant but many more don't marry while also attempting to finish school.

Grey Wolf 🚫

@wholf359

For me, it's somewhat 'all of a piece.' One of the themes in my story is the idea of the do-over as a way to 'fix' things that went wrong. Tied into that is the idea of the first life being, on balance, a learning experience but not something to try to regain. Both to make that work, and to make it plausible, I needed maturity and reasonably detailed memories of what happened.

On the other hand, I've tried to apply the same standard to memories. If a character is decades away from the events of their current year, some things will still be vividly memorable, but other things are vague in various ways. They might well remember, say, that Chernobyl happened, and how, but when? On the other hand, remembering when Challenger happened (to a close approximation) is much easier.

For things like sports betting, business, etc, it's the same standard. I'm not writing a walking sports almanac, but many people remember a modest number of standout events from that age. Nor am I writing someone who memorized the stock market as a whole, but major events and big names may stand out enough to have 'future knowledge.'

I definitely wouldn't change a thing in that regard. It works for me and for the story I'm telling, and doing something else wouldn't.

The rest gets more and more 'off topic' - but relevant to the larger discussion.

I will definitely agree with the way childhood was in the 1980s. There were limits, at least in my experience - most parents would frown greatly on a couple going into a room and closing the door, for instance. Necessity is the mother of invention, and plenty of sex was happening, but there were constraints. On the other hand, 'I'm going to the mall - back tonight!' wasn't uncommon, and 'the mall' might well have meant 'the mall, three other stores, the park, the library, a friend's house, and a restaurant,' and the parent would have no idea (nor would they feel the kid had lied, even by omission).

For high school in the 1980s, though - and in my experience - teen pregnancy was very uncommon. When it did happen, it was hushed up. Perhaps the girl, or the whole family, 'moved away,' or perhaps there was an abortion.

Nowadays, there are daycares in all of the nearby high schools and many middle schools. Back then? Anyone admitting they were or had been pregnant would have been a complete pariah.

It's easy to tie the rise of cell phones to the decline in 'just be home by dark.' There's some truth to that, but it's much more complicated than that, I think. In theory, cell phones make it easier, not harder - you can track your kids and make contact on a whim.

It's much more an overall rise in risk-averse parenting. More than once I've mentioned an article I remember reading in Time decades ago (late 1990s, almost certainly). The author was in some sort of medicine and their thesis was 'There has been a huge drop in the number of kids with broken bones. This is a bad thing.'

The argument was that the decline was because parents forbade things like climbing trees, playing on pavement, and other behaviors that sometimes result in broken bones. The author believed (and I generally agree) that the short-term payoff in 'safety' was being achieved at the expense of kids developing risk-management skills. If you never put yourself at risk, you don't learn to assess it, you just reflexively avoid it.

I've also personally witnessed a parent charging across a playground screaming and scooping up their kid because there was roughly a 1% chance that another kid on a swing might possibly have bumped into their kid, then giving their kid a lecture. Or parents running to the aid of their kid with a very minor cut or abrasion and treating it nearly as a medical emergency.

Replies:   jimq2
jimq2 🚫

@Grey Wolf

A friend was telling me that his 14 year old granddaughter just graduated from 8th grade. He said that there were 27 pregnancies/abortions between the 6th, 7th, & 8th grades last year with an enrollment of about 225 per class.

awnlee jawking 🚫

@wholf359

Since this thread has already drifted, I have to wonder how the personality and memories of an adult can be fitted into a child's brain. Surely, the very act would make the brain an adult brain and therefore the child would be subject to adult-type memory lapses and reduced learning capacity.

AJ

Replies:   Michael Loucks  irvmull
Michael Loucks 🚫

@awnlee jawking

Given our limited understanding of cognition, memory, and thought processes, I'm not sure that would be the case.

Given such an overlay is well beyond our understanding and ability, I think we're safe in saying 'we have no idea how that would work'. :-)

irvmull 🚫

@awnlee jawking

Since this thread has already drifted, I have to wonder how the personality and memories of an adult can be fitted into a child's brain. Surely, the very act would make the brain an adult brain and therefore the child would be subject to adult-type memory lapses and reduced learning capacity.

Those memory lapses don't come along until old age. And adults can learn as well or better than kids. Less distractions.

As for fitting adult personality into a kid's brain - haven't you ever known a child who some people would describe as being "an old soul"?

Replies:   awnlee jawking
awnlee jawking 🚫

@irvmull

Those memory lapses don't come along until old age.

I believe they increase from the moment the brain matures. Medically they're classed as normal. They're not usually symptomatic of brain health deterioration.

And adults can learn as well or better than kids.

It takes adults longer to learn a new language or to play a new instrument or to become proficient at a new sport.

AJ

Replies:   REP
REP 🚫

@awnlee jawking

I believe they increase from the moment the brain matures. Medically they're classed as normal. They're not usually symptomatic of brain health deterioration.

It seems as if you believe memory loss has a single cause. I believe there are two types of memory lapses: temporary and permanent.

Temporary memory lapse seems to be related to the brains ability to retrieve a memory. Typically, the memory is retrieved, which infers that damage is to the memory retrieval system, and that type of damage is repairable. This is the type of memory problems that are typical of young people.

Permanent memory lapse seems to be related to death of brain cells that store the memory. When the brain cells containing the memory die, the memory is lost and there is nothing left to retrieve. This type of memory loss is permanent and it is common in older adults.

Brain health deterioration is related to the death of brain cells, regardless of the cause of brain cell death. I believe temporary and permanent loss of memory is related to the death of brain cells, but the dead brain cells are in different parts of the brain.

Replies:   awnlee jawking
awnlee jawking 🚫

@REP

It seems as if you believe memory loss has a single cause. I believe there are two types of memory lapses: temporary and permanent.

Temporary memory lapse seems to be related to the brains ability to retrieve a memory.

I'm thinking of temporary memory lapses, like going into a room and not remembering why you did so. (Until you leave the room, and suddenly your mind remembers.)

I understand it's due to short-term memory becoming over-cluttered.

AJ

Replies:   REP  jimq2
REP 🚫

@awnlee jawking

I understand it's due to short-term memory becoming over-cluttered.

I don't think anyone, even doctors, understands the brain and how it functions. All you have to do is review all the different conflicting theories that the medical researchers seem to generate.

Dominions Son 🚫

@REP

I understand it's due to short-term memory becoming over-cluttered.

I don't think anyone, even doctors, understands the brain and how it functions. All you have to do is review all the different conflicting theories that the medical researchers seem to generate.

I've seen claims that we never genuinely forget anything, but rather our brains lose track of what's where in it's storage.

People with total recall just have better indexing.

Replies:   LupusDei
LupusDei 🚫
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@Dominions Son

I'm increasingly drawn to the opinion our long term memory functions much more like the current generative "AI" models anyone wants to admit.

In short, we reconstruct the memories from a schematic and promt of basic concepts up every time we recall it, rather than retrieving it whole like a video or something such. What's stored is a relation link map between the concepts. That graph can tolerate minor damage in most cases, but loss of a major node breaks the chain and thus disintegrate the memory. Minor damage is "repaired" by basically making a plausible guess, making up the missing details on the go.

Memories are mutable. Every time we recall something, we do a reinterpretation of the structure graph in actual context, and populate it with current values of the concepts required by it. Concepts that may have undergone complex overhaul since. Then optimize it all so it made sense again, again in current context and conditions, and actualized opinions we now hold as true. Then we store away the recreation, overwriting the original, just to repeat it again the next time. Frequently recalled memories become narratives, stories, legends we tell ourselves over and over, subtly editing each time, without knowing.

Memories get packed and merged, and unified as categories of a general scheme, sacrificing accuracy for capacity, more concise promts against a better qvantizied model of concepts. As the model evolve, old promts become inaccurate and inefficient and ultimately produce nonsense, then discarded -- or not.

Replies:   REP
REP 🚫

@LupusDei

How does the theory explain Alzheimers?

awnlee jawking 🚫

@REP

I don't think anyone, even doctors, understands the brain and how it functions. All you have to do is review all the different conflicting theories that the medical researchers seem to generate.

Agreed, it all seems very anecdotal.

AJ

jimq2 🚫

@awnlee jawking

I'm thinking of temporary memory lapses, like going into a room and not remembering why you did so.

Don't you know it is the door causing that?

4bfny1l3kixg0sf84ji 🚫

@wholf359

There was a comedian who mentioned: Now that I'm getting older.. I find myself thinking about the 'here after' a lot more.... like.. every time I enter a room, I'm like "Now what am I here after?"

irvmull 🚫

@wholf359

Consider this:

After many hours per day, usually 5 days a week, for 12 years in public school, 19% of high school graduates in the US can't read.
https://www.abtaba.com/blog/us-literacy-statistics

Yet a completely illiterate adult can be taught to read in about 100 days.
https://www.academia.edu/3441595/Literacy_for_All_in_100_Days_A_research_based_strategy_for_fast_progress_in_low_income_countries

Who learns faster?

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