Okay. I had to make a writer's adjustment to the last chapter of "Mayhem in a Pill."
I had to change the birthday that Tim had forgotten about from his sixteenth to his fifteenth. The age change was something I was planning for a couple of reasons. But I have decided to postpone those reasons and replace them with a new idea to try and grow the character a little bit more.
I hope it will work. My outline changes are showing me it will; I've been going by those consistently since I made them AFTER I started writing the story. Yes, it's true. I started writing the story with a slight outline in mind, but the story quickly overgrew my subtle imaginary outline, so I took the time to write out a fuller outline, and I have followed that ever since.
Instead of forgetting his sixteenth birthday, I believe it would be a much more believable story for him to forget his fifteenth birthday. Several have asked why would an American teenager forget his sixteenth birthday, and those arguments have won me over. So I'm making the change.
So I guess the moral of our story is a well-argued point can change minds. That and me coming up with a cooler story path sounded more fun.
On another note, I have read several people not enjoying the story's pace. I understand and agree the pacing has slowed. I'm working on it. But, I also understand that several readers would also like me to post the entire story for their amusement immediately.
I'd love to. But I can't since I write, send it to the editors, and finally post. I don't have chapters pre-written, but I do have scenes pre-written and not thoroughly fleshed out. But when appropriate, I do bring those in. A good example was the death of A-Train. I wrote maybe 90 percent of that scene a couple of months earlier and then filled it out when I pasted it into the chapter.
So fear not, minions, I am working, and I'm also improving, hopefully.
Tee Hee.
--Shinerdrinker