Okay. I hope I have prepared myself for the probable onslaught of negativity coming but I just wanted to warn everyone that there is something here that might cause trouble.
Oh, wait, no, don't worry, not too bad but something that tends to trigger many readers of this story. It's something I thought might become a problem so I decided to ignore it and leave the writing as is. But one of my editors rightfully pointed out that a sizeable subset of readers may be annoyed by what I wholeheartedly use as a very dense description of the line of scrimmage play during a football game. Namely a large exposition on the nuances of playing football among the big uglies.
He suggested I might want to remove a large chunk of it but I decided to leave it in. It is a deep description of what happens in the ever so brief moment of the two lines set up to face off against each other and the chess match that goes on in those brief seconds.
The people who have made their minds known, feel there is too much description of football in this story. I can see their point. But what I'm also trying to describe is that football is not just beefy testosterone-filled men ramming their bodies into each other with the hopes of moving an oblong ball made of pigskin in between two giant H's. There is subtlety. There is beauty. And yes, there are violent beefy men ramming their bodies into each other. But there is a method to the madness and I am describing these things to point out that Tim is learning this as well. His strength and speed give him a leg up on everyone he plays against but he can be beaten.
Thus he is growing.
But if you still don't like all the descriptions of the football game, well I think I set it aside, especially the more thick explanations, and you should be able to skip over that part. I do that often myself while reading other stories, like when long bouts of love-making take me out of the story that has captured my imagination, but I want to continue in the story.
So enjoy the next chapter in Mayhem in a Pill and know that there is a method to the madness. And maybe, hopefully, I can unlock a few eyes to what happens during the battles on the line of scrimmage when you watch a football game.
--Shinerdrinker