Howdy,
WOW I was overwhelmed with the kind words and advice from what I assume are mostly other writers. Some valuable comments.
I guess as a few have said and I am paraphrasing "write for yourself". I have never been a writer, I have never written for Me. This story was written to someone specific that I thought I would share. Our lifestyle is swing, some of our friends are the BDSM crowd. So its little bits that were included in My prose.
Get an editor. Very valuable, I saw the list of volunteer editors and My head started to spin. No idea where to start. I asked advice from a couple editors and they said essentially there are some who basically spell check and some who want to totally rewrite your story. Finding the editor who works well with you felt like a "needle in a haystack".
One person mentioned character development and suggested reading other works. I do read a tonne on here. I still don't understand character development...lol
I admire and marvel the skill of My fave authors to tell a story. I wrote what felt like too much. It came out o 4,000 words and 25KB story. I can't fathom the imagination, time and effort that goes into 300-400-500KB and larger stories.
Anywho just wanted to say thank you.
D.J.